Thirst

Something told me to wait,

But the impatience within swirled and paced.

I have started myself to hate

For this brought the worst out of me.

The longing inside craved and starved,

Nothing ever satisfying its hunger.

It rained and poured like never before

But the THIRST just grew more and more..

Author's Note

It just came out as mindless doodling. Thought of sharing. Let me know how you found it..!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the honest tone and how you described the thirst and hunger.
"It rained and poured like never before
But the THIRST just grew more and more.."
Some folks are never filled or content. Many reasons for. A man who had nothing will work harder than a man who was given all things. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

I am glad that you liked it!
Thank you for the review.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Indra Neil]

this fine brevity reflects the inner struggle! the last stanza is my favorite! well done!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you! Glad you liked it.

[Indra Neil]

u r welcome! keep writing!!

[Ben Noah Suri]

Liked the expression.... The more we suppress the more it becomes stronger.... The last four lines were good...

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for encouraging words..!

[jdtunafish3175]

Interesting take, makes me think of how passion starts as nothing and grows before you know it. Very introspective, I like it!!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for insightful words..!

[T.Y Abdul]

Mindless doodling? Seriously? Its simple and craving. I love simple and I love to crave but . . . the thirst never ends. Good work.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Oh! I am so glad that you connected with it..!

[T.Y Abdul]

Nice piece

[Gaurav Bhattacharya]

Very very practical and really appreciate , again simple yet full of depth and thoughts. Really nice one Jyoti

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

I really appreciate the kind words. Thank you..!

[Kshitij Srivastava]

I liked the raw subject you chose and also the writing style of it. Also I found it clever that your writing left it very open ended, I can interpret in nore than one way. Enjoyed it, thanks for sharing. ☺

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Yes. I deliberately left it that way.. I am glad you enjoyed it!

[Isabel]

I don't know how to interpret this to be honest. I feel like it could be anything and I really like how your poem challenges my thoughts. Nice work!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

I am myself a bit unsure on what context I had written this piece..
I was just doodling..

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for the honest review..!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

profound couplets........and also a homogeneous mixture of frustrating thoughts........
very well expressed.......
i liked it!!!
:)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you..!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

my pleasure............ :) :)