Thirst

Something told me to wait,

But the impatience within swirled and paced.

I have started myself to hate

For this brought the worst out of me.

The longing inside craved and starved,

Nothing ever satisfying its hunger.

It rained and poured like never before

But the THIRST just grew more and more..

Author's Note

It just came out as mindless doodling. Thought of sharing. Let me know how you found it..!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the honest tone and how you described the thirst and hunger.
"It rained and poured like never before
But the THIRST just grew more and more.."
Some folks are never filled or content. Many reasons for. A man who had nothing will work harder than a man who was given all things. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

I am glad that you liked it!
Thank you for the review.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Vinay]

The last couplet is too good Jyoti!!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you! :)

[SoulBird]

jyoti yor writtings always makes my day... very good piece keep it up

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much for your kind words! :D

[Jibey]

You're not the first to feel like this... and you capture it well

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Well glad m not alone. Thank you for the kind visit, Jibey.

[Arghya Samaddar]

Very nice, short but meaningful with depth

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you!

[zunie frost]

so true !!! thanks for sharing such an inspiring thought !!!!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you!

[Gaurav]

Really liked the flow of words. It motivated me to read the poem in one go. Beautifully written and superbly described. Thanks for sharing :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Glad you liked it. Thank you for the kind comment.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

The words just blew like a soothing breeze in this one... good write.....

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much for your kind words.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I think...sometimes.....no matter tha guilty feeling, and crap like that, you just gotta feed the beast... Starve it....and you'll end up being completely unable to satisfy it .

Personal experience... Me and my bf, take every given opportunity, cuz we might not get another, for long, long... and then, we go insane.. lol.
But seriously, feed tha beast, so it's pleased, and you'll live a great life. :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Oh yeah Danny!
Thank you for your kind comment! :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You're welcome :D
just sent you, tha links ;)

[Moizz]

delightful ,moving and yearning of thirst all
I could summon is it's beautiful.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you!

[Moizz]

you are welcome.

[Willard Wells]

fun piece and sometimes just playing brings about some lovely work like yours. Nicely penned.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for the kind words.