Died Sweetly on a Friday

Charade was played, and just as well, as the worst of men,

But the game cannot be won, and cheaters can't be beat.

Laid them low, and made it so, then never seen again,

World melted, then reforged, in your lustful heat.

Killed the ancients, bled them out, with nothing but a smile,

From across a room of betters, none that could compare.

Took the field, and won the day, but the lady's guile,

Lost the war but no surprise, as it was not fought fair.

Wanted and pursued and wooed, but flew away too fast,

Chased, not chaste, and gave away that which was reserved.

Diamond encrusted, topaz rusted, left upon the grass,

Trampled it, and then asked, "What she hath deserved?"

Against these men, your defeat, was all but assured,

And so they spied, and then lied, and boys fetched their swords.

Reviews

[Zach]

I love this and I love it even more after reading your explanation to Lydia. Anne Boleyns story is certainly an interesting one. But taking this out of that context, it still reveals a genuine truth about how far your plotting and planning will take you before fate inevitably steps in.

[Jwakefield]

I'm glad you liked it, it's an interesting story, and not a very fair one. Thank you!

[Gleb Zavlanov]

A very interesting, beautifully written poem with such a deep meaning behind it. Great job!

[Strider Marcus Jones]

Pure magic! Like the internal rhyme too.100/100

[Jwakefield]

Thank you, I love messing with these different sonnet forms.

[Sami Khalil]

An interesting poem. Thank you for sharing...:)

[Jwakefield]

Thank you very much!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Lydia Shutter]

I liked the rhyming in this one...it made the poem flow easily. An interesting story you tell here. Sounds like a bit of a vent to me, but it is not clear against whom you are raising the sword. Lydia

[Jwakefield]

I've been reading a lot of Thomas Wyatt's work, written (presumably) about Anne Boleyn. This is about her as well, I always thought she got a bad deal. She outplayed everyone, but then just lost by default because she was a woman. Thanks for the comments!

[Lydia Shutter]

Aha, thanks for explaining!

[Surnam]

The rhyming struck me too. Love the 'Spying' part.