Loving You.

We met by chance,

And became lovers by choice.

I’ll still remember our first kiss,

Long after you’ve forgotten our last.

 

I stay awake to watch you sleep,

Lingering in the aftermath of your touch.

The moon and its mistress watch in anticipation

As I smoulder in the heated bliss that is you.

 

Your touch burns with desire

And I hear you whisper

“never mind the darkness love,

that’s where the stars shine brightest”

 

Our emotions take motion

plunging to depths I have never known

we become one, I melt in the ecstasy of your embrace

and I lose myself in the adventure of loving you..

 

Reviews

[EMF]

I will be brutally honest. When I saw the stock photo I thought 'oh Bugger. Erotic drivel'. Based upon the ammount of erotic writers who use stock photo's to titilate.

Miss. I am a moron.

I am a moron, because, had I followed my original impulse to move onto another poem of yours I would have missed a truly beautiful and heart lifting poem. I am a moron, for not engaging from the very start with the sheer love that shines through every line of this work. I am a moron for nearly missing another truly wonderful work.

Not only is it a wonderful poem of love, it is an exceptionally well written poem of love. Rarer than you might think. It is very difficult to sum up a moment, more so to encapsulate an emotion. You have done both. Superb work. You are a gifted artist.

I am still a moron, but learning

[Jvonne]

Thank you. You are right about the image I decided to use though. But I guess we are both still learning. Thanks again.

[EMF]

On reflection, the image does work. The problem is not your use, but the overuse by second rate erotica. Sorry if that sounds harsh. I would keep the image. And it is a superb work

As it's this pure with true love... wonderfully spoken.
“never mind the darkness love,
that’s where the stars shine brightest”
As this is it... a lot are still searching for,
Wonderful poetry!

E.L. p.s. Ek gaan heel gou meer van jou mooi werke lees. Veel liefs uit Nederland

[Liderien]

This is beautiful!

[Laura Maidah]

I love the "aftermath of your touch". It's a nice twist to a used line.

[R J Askew]

I think the chance/choice point is well made, both are needed. And I esp like the last line. Here's to adventure in love!

[Everett DeValle]

A very passionate poem...I Love it...."I stay awake to watch you sleep" resonates with me so well...I guess because I do that too. Thank you for sharing.

[Hidden Happiness]

Really awesome..i guess it feels really good to have somebody like that, amazing piece of work
please read some of my stuff if you have the time...:):).

[barricade]

gorgeous write, loved each word, so perfect...beautifully written. keep it up...

[Flo_writer]

“never mind the darkness love,
that’s where the stars shine brightest”

Very nice phrase. True talent in your mind. Beautiful poem. I say whoever inspired such praise is trutly one who must be worthy of it. The love in your poem could not have been presented better. Well done

[khalid]

very sweet wonderful poem with extreme feelings of love and passion, it also has some little feelings of bitterness that you feel he forgets some details..

i liked the images you have drawn here like the stars in dark nights...
i liked the flow and words picking as well as the nice rhyme,,
great work really..