I will be brutally honest. When I saw the stock photo I thought 'oh Bugger. Erotic drivel'. Based upon the ammount of erotic writers who use stock photo's to titilate.
Miss. I am a moron.
I am a moron, because, had I followed my original impulse to move onto another poem of yours I would have missed a truly beautiful and heart lifting poem. I am a moron, for not engaging from the very start with the sheer love that shines through every line of this work. I am a moron for nearly missing another truly wonderful work.
Not only is it a wonderful poem of love, it is an exceptionally well written poem of love. Rarer than you might think. It is very difficult to sum up a moment, more so to encapsulate an emotion. You have done both. Superb work. You are a gifted artist.
I am still a moron, but learning
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Thank you. You are right about the image I decided to use though. But I guess we are both still le.. read moreThank you. You are right about the image I decided to use though. But I guess we are both still learning. Thanks again.
12 Years Ago
On reflection, the image does work. The problem is not your use, but the overuse by second rate ero.. read moreOn reflection, the image does work. The problem is not your use, but the overuse by second rate erotica. Sorry if that sounds harsh. I would keep the image. And it is a superb work
Just found this. Favourite line “never mind the darkness love, thats where stars shine the brightest”. Im not a big fan about the overused topic of love. But this was beautifully worded
"I lose myself in the adventure of loving you."
A love affair is an adventure, we hit all the high spots
in loving. Then finally our love passes on and we reach
the bottom. In the interim we are flung about by the
winds of passion, longing, lust and deceit.
Your poem says it all. Great writing.
Yes, lose the stock photo.
Sensual, erotic and passionate. The poem is very coherent and free flowing, each line just leads to others. Enjoyed reading it.
Specially the part where you say....''“never mind the darkness love,
that’s where the stars shine brightest”
And i also love the way you ended it. Yeah love is an endless adventure and ecstasy.
Awesome
hot
deep
powerful poem.
I just adore the second stanza, I can imagine watching someone sleep, just to bathe in the reality of their presence and love. This was really wonderfully written.
I enjoyed the idea that the romance would be an adventure, and the way that you wrote this I can see a moment at night, watching him sleep at the same time that I gain perspective on what you are feeling throughout the thing.
Fantastic job!
I fell in to this too early, so,;
Chance ,choice,kiss,last,
Sleep, touch,anticipation, you.
Desire, whisper,love,brightest.
Motion, known, embrace, you.....