My blood you swallow

This is my first for this account. I hope you like it, I can't really tell you what this is really about. Can you guess?

You wanted my heart?

Well here it is, broken.

With no power to fight.

And my white flag flies.

Kneeling, I surrender.

My heart no longer whole.

In weak, thin hands lay,

the two halves torn in pieces.

Silent, with cut throats.

But you stand above,

drunk on the spilling juices.

My blood you swallow.

Each lick of your lips,

satisfying the hunger.

Choking arteries...

Until there's nothing left.

My drained veins lay still, hollow.

And all that's left are

the little red shards,

of my shivering remains.

Throbbing at death's door.

Then at last you're through,

With feasting on my heart.

So you turn your back,

and then walk away...

Licking from each finger,

the stain of my lost soul.

Author's Note

Grammar?

Reviews

[DaWonAndOnli]

Good write. Very deep and emotional.

[fallendemonofmercy]

i absolutely LOVED THIS!!!!!!!!........
actually this may be one of the very best pieces that i've read on here - lovely.
this is EXACTLY what i'm looking for in my contests - check it out.
regards
Bliss

[---]

A dark piece of poetry is always good. This is excellent!!

Don't ever stop writing.

~Phoenix~

[Emmie]

As far as my eyes see, there aren't any apparent grammar issues. A really great read though =) You give amazing imagery through this piece.