There was more to me

Mourning Me

Why am I distant?

Why am I cold?

Why am I lving inside of a hole?

I'm living the way that I pushed myself to be

A little less happy and a  lot less me.

I'm not the same person

I'm not what you see

I have a thin person lost inside of me

Author's Note

Wrote this at 3:00AM, left it on my computer and thought what the hell I am not exactly feelling what I wrote, but I was feeling what I wrote. Does this make sense. Oh well

Reviews

[KonxOmPax]

Way to go. Short and sweet. That last line is great. The imagery there is somewhat disturbing whereas the rest of the poem is simple without much depth. Creepy even, lol. But I guess that's your point. It's very disturbing what we human beings can do to ourselves.

[Alexander]

This is truly a beautiful piece of work.
Z

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is such a thoughtful piece of writing, though it is raw but indeed it is very strong and conveyed the message very well...
I guess sometimes our best work comes from plots like this only!
Really it is such a brilliant piece of writing :)

Awesome!

[Wolfwind Words]

The piece is brilliant! It's flavor perfectly alows for people to relate to it. Everyone has an innerself that doesn't match the external shell, always trying to get out, make itself heard. I feel this one close to heart and on a daily basis.

Kudos!
Aaron Maycroft