here I stand

Here I stand,
Until the time
Was it a crime to see what cannot be touched
Hear voices speak words that can't be undone
Was it my fault I was invincible
To the naked eye, I am invisible
I cannot be seen
Because no one wants to see me
I am different
Different from the rest of them
So they ignore me
But I don't ignore them
No one is friendly
Why were they so blind
Because I am not them
I am only mine
I am different
But I can see
But they can't see me
I watch them fall
Divided they fall
Together they die
But here I stand
Until the end of time
Was it a crime that I was unique
Original to the human mind
I was invisible to there standards
Invisible to their lies
But as they kneel to beg
I watch them beg
But here I stand until the end of time
Was it a crime for me to live my life
A crime for wanting to survive
No one would answer
So I will wait until the end of time

Reviews

[Tori]

Man, do you have any idea how good you are? You seriously need to make a book of your poems(if you don't ahve one yet...) And if you ever do, let me know! I'm gonna freakin buy it. This is very good. I love the description. The idea of evrything you described makes me exicted. It makes me wanna destroy the world(Ina good way. I promise) But yes...excellent. Bravo, my friend, bravo.

[Voice11]

KOOL! I like this one. it has a great...story line? ...so to speak, I can picture everything when you say it. Great job!

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. very powerful flow.. you could feel the emotions of being alone through this.. although if this is written from reality.. coming from one who was in a crowd.. you can still feel lonely (I admit there were some fun times but overall not worth it)! Be thankful that you did not get caught up in the stereotypes and troubles that can afflict people trying to fit in. It is better in my eyes to have that 1 or 2 best friends then be in the supposed "in" crowd. While in such a crowd.. there is backstabbing, control (there can be high standards..one wrong move outside of what the group likes and bam), bullying.. it is a social climb that can do harm to self-esteem.. and worse. My advise based on experience would be to try to balance career and socializing.. unless you are at the top of the chain in a social circle.. but then you have to worry that many may try to break you down... as everyone wants to be on top. I wouldn't wait.. just live your life and have fun! You sound unique.. that is the best quality to have on earth.. embrace it! Thank you so much for sharing. =)

[PaperHearts]

Amazing! Your poem had such effortless flow, and carried a strong emotion that I could relate to.
I loved the lines:
Here I stand,
Until the time
Was it a crime to see what cannot be touched
Hear voices speak words that can't be undone

Just one typo though. In the line: I was invisible to there standards
Did you mean 'their' instead of 'there'??
Other than that though, what a truly brilliant piece! Very thought-provoking indeed.
~PaperHearts