Blister me

With your gun
And your knee
You scream fun
You blister me

So I fight
So you see
That tonight
I can be

All I am
All you need
I am ram
See my speed

I hate you
This agreed
That so true
Hate exceeds

You’re confused
I guarantee
But I’m bruised
To 3rd degree

I love you
You are she
But we hate through
A blistered me

Author's Note

This to me is a fight between two lovers. The fighting hurts on both sides (physically and mentally), and though their love is strong they keep on and on knowing the effects on their emotional states. As for the ram thing it signifies stubbornness and resilience against compromise

Reviews

[loowzerX]

I think that this is very interesting, even the way you wrote it. :)

[Miss Coral]

Great piece.. the conflict is expressed very well, and the emotions shine through. Great rhythm, even though the lines are very short, the poem conveyed a lot. Awesome job. c:

[Sasha]

Another interesting piece. I knew there was a conflict between two people but never would have understood completely if it wasn't for the note (thanks for that). Still a great rhyme and flow. One thing that caught my eye was in the last stanza, I'd make it:

I love you
you are she
But we hate
Through blistered me

It's the same difference, but flows a bit better.

[thatbryngirl]

this is neat. i like it..

[ashley]

I love this. I love the rhythm, it's fantastic. Great poem! :D

[KatiePie]

This is beautiful, I love how you've captured the pain of both side, how you have so much emotion inside this. The rhythmn it reads with is also very nice, I like it! Your very talented! great write and Keep writing!
-Cathrine

[R E Tree]

Many people can relate to this. It's like having a argument with someone and your getting nowhere but going around in circles all the time because that person is unaware of the damage they are causing. Great write

[Alexis Raine]

First stanza captures attention, and the shortness of each line keeps the poem rhythm choppy and violent --just like the fight depicted. Very nice.

[Elizabeth]

I really enjoyed this. I've lived this, and you did a superb job of capturing the raw emotion. I could see the fight... it reminded me of the inner monologue that runs through my mind in a heated argument. Well done.

[Starting Over]

I loved this! I could see this being something to represent two lovers who go through the same cycle over and over! Amazing job JT!