Do you miss me

If I beat my head
Pulled my hair
Gripped a trigger
Would you miss me

Well before I do
I have a situation
This moment is my last
Would you kiss me

Your lips touch mine
Same soft loving glaze
A minute for a lifetime
Look away, don’t see

Blast are my brains
I bet now you regret
That bullet was meant for you
Do you miss me

Reviews

[clauds294]

Wow this poem I fell in love with, it has put such a tear jerking visual in my head. My heart aches for the person. It could be that it reminds me of my own experiences. Wonderful write. So powerful and i love it a lot.

[QuietPoet]

Very sad write. Heartbreaking, I felt your pain and hurt. Great job on it.

[~ Otto Girl ~]

very sad but nice showing your emotions.

[*Always be Me:)*]

Aaaawww. hun this is sad, but i like it. :)

[Zane Mathias]

Good write dude.. I do want to say though that you should beef it up some add a little bit more detail in each stanza. Ps i will never critique you on propper grammer for the main reason i am no good at it and i belive that as poets we control what we write without guidlines or barriers telling us that what we have done is not up to a gramatical standard!

[JustJordan. x3]

omg. i really like this one. like ALOT. [:

[J.Black]

Liked how it was ended.

[Alexis Raine]

The fourth stanza. Shocking, good wrap up.
I like the fact there is no question mark at the end.
That is all.

[Lydia Jamison]

There. You got your review.

[chaotic katie]

this is an amazing peice the emotion is fantastic and the imagry is right on great job