Judging eyes

Step after step
I hear pain in my cries
So long have I wept
Away from judging eyes

They prick and poke
Chip your heart with lies
Until now I never spoke
Watch my knuckles fly

Their blood is cold
From a heart that pumps ice
This argument is old
But my cuts are precise

To you your heart fed
I’m sorry that it’s not warm
I must leave you dead
I see your judging eyes scorn

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

A lot of imagery and emotion in a relatively short poem! The third stanza is my favorite! Speaking with your fists, great metaphor!
Barbara

[Lilly]

Hefty words... I like the rhyme in this poem. - Very nicely done.

[loowzerX]

very good poem.

[The Uncommon Muse]

this is wonderfully written, I can feel the anguish, feel the sadness, I love the flow, the rhymes, the meter....well done, and congrats on placing in the contest.

[MiidniightSoul]

Such a powerful poem. Wow you did an amazing job ^__^

[Sasha]

This is an interesting piece. I like the way that even though you didn't say anything too directly, I understood all that was happening the whole way through. It was a good rhyme/flow, too. Good job.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Judging eyes can be cruel, i would say are always cruel .. we don't like that feeling of being judged.
This is a poem of metaphors it seems ..

To you your heart fed
I’m sorry that it’s not warm
I must leave you dead
I see your judging eyes scorn

Wonderfully written.

Chloe

[misha]

Great job. I love it when I can feel the emotion in a poem

[Randy`s Princess]

what a fantastic piece your so accurate with feelings here really well done

[chaotic katie]

this is soo amazing and also easy to relate to great job this was fantastic