Rage

You know I try to visualize
Things I love
People I despise

But nothing compares
To the pictures I see
I feel this despair
I hate this family

From the point of no return
I set the house on fire
I want to see it burn
It is my lone desire

Satisfactory is a word
But a word I’ll never use
This feeling is absurd
Why do I feel abused

The paint turns gray
And the wood a black
What could I possibly say
To make time go back

Flames engulf my heart
It is this rage I feel
These tears run like fire
Its burning is so real

I fear this need
A broken heart compels
This is my plea
Please oh god listen well

Tell her I am sorry
For I treated her wrong
Up in the sky so starry
Please hope hear my song!

My breathing is at a halt
The smoke fills my lungs
Memories flash, it is my fault
Blazing hate blood on my tongue

Author's Note

The her I refer to is my mother. I centered this around a dream of mine, after which i felt a wave of guilt and regret. And thus became rage

Reviews

[Livana Lowell]

Shouldn't it be: "I set the house on fire" or did you mean "of", otherwise I'm not sure of the meaning exactly. And this line also confuses me a little: "Why do I feel abused" I didn't understand where the word "abused" came from or what it's supposed to mean. Feel free to explain. No wait, is burning the house a feeling, a desire, a dream or something along those lines? I dunno.

Um, also "god" should be captitalized.

Also who's the "her" you're referring to. I don't understand. And why'd you say "blazing hate" when the narrator seemed feel an ounce remorse such as wanting to go back?

Overall, the imgrey is amzaing. I like the comparison of tears and fire. That's really unigue. I complement you for sharing.

[clauds294]

This really has great emotion, conviction and is intriguing. For me, personally, it was hard to follow but still understandable and lured me in. Great poem :)

[Zane Mathias]

Ok this is what i am talking about raw emotion. In which i mean you are in a state where you are not writing with your mind but with your heart! now I hate to make hummor but for some reason this poem made me want to listen to P!nks Funhouse song!!!! but i love this! what i said in "do you miss me" with adding more depth I have to say that this one has pleanty of depth and would not change a thing!!!! B.P.

[Marie Harrison]

Your poem is very special. I loved how honest you were about your feelings and the moving way you expressed them. The imagery throughout the poem was amazing to read. We all have disturbing dreams about people we love from time to time. Thank goodness not many of them come true!

[Augustus]

This is a very powerfully written poem, Justin... Especially, the short lines and the easy rhyme build in intensity towards a climax of rage and regret... Powerful emotions are expressed brilliantly, especially in the last few stanzas. Everything after "The paint turns black" is exquisite poetry and portrays the poet's anguish very vividly. Great poem!

[Dupree]

wow! this is very good. i'm intrigued. I'll have to check out some of your other works

[chaotic katie]

this is a really strong peice with lots of emotion i loved every second of reading this great job

[Laura Yida <3]

this is absolutely amazing, filled with nothing but emotion. great job.

[Dutch Jr.]

Emotion, emotion, emotion. Just a great piece you put together here.

[Rawr!!XD]

This is.....amazing. The emotion and imagery all working together to help the reader understand. I thought it was absolutely amazing.
You really are an amazing writer. Keep up the great work!

[James Johnson]

You know whats ironic: people reviewing poems, judging the authors grammar, then misspelling words themselves. Your poem is great :) i like the ammount of emotion put into this :)