An Abandoned Mutt

An Abandoned Mutt

A Poem by justice

An abandoned mutt

sits under a flickering streetlight

in the blowing snow

of January.


His white fur

blends effortlessly

with the blizzard.


The glow

of his sad eyes

the only beacon

to alert his presence.


Like a lighthouse,

he sweeps his head

from left to right

as if calling

to the ocean

to return a lost lover.


Except the ships are cars

which pass by him

as ruthlessly as the waves

mocking the forlorn lover

as they wash nothing

on the beach.


I call to him.


His eyes dart

in my direction

and for a split second

the melancholy eyes

are hopeful.


Upon seeing my face,

however,

hope fades


and he returns

to sweeping

left to right


like a lighthouse

searching

for a lost lover.

© 2011 justice


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Loved the repetitiveness of this poem and the great descriptive writing I can feel the emotion emitted from this poem and I really like it the poem flowed well and the structure was good I just wish it was longer lol Keep them coming I will have to view more of your work

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Oh.. I love this beautifully thought out and unusal poem. Fabulous idea, and so well written.

Posted 13 Years Ago


love it, the poem can mean so many different things

Posted 13 Years Ago


i loved this. very sad but the metaphor that was used was great.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is sad =/
Nice use of metaphor.
It's beautiful how you compared the cars to a ship :)
Such a great poem full of deep meaning!
Great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


A very entertaining poem. Made me fee the dog was hoping for someone to return. I like the pace of the poem. Made it come alive with the strong description. A very good ending to a excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is sad and beautiful

Posted 13 Years Ago


doggiee :( poor doggie

Posted 13 Years Ago


perfectly painted , just enough warmth of compassion in this cold, sad scene

Posted 13 Years Ago


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the sadness permeates this piece..your visuals are powerful and your descriptive phrase..just added to the mood..

Posted 13 Years Ago


Loved the repetitiveness of this poem and the great descriptive writing I can feel the emotion emitted from this poem and I really like it the poem flowed well and the structure was good I just wish it was longer lol Keep them coming I will have to view more of your work

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on January 27, 2011
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justice
justice

Omaha, NE



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I am an out of work, out of school, out of luck 21-year-old trying to make it in the world of writing. I am fairly new to sharing my work and I am just looking to improve myself. I welcome ALL critici.. more..

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