Your Eyes

A love poem!

In all my life I have never seen
anything so beautiful as your eyes so green.
To compare them to anything would be unfair
for they put nature herself to shame.

The stars must twinkle every night
because they try with all their might
to be as beautiful as those green eyes.
Diamond sparkles are blemished too.
They are trying too hard to be like you
and your eyes with the subtle hint of blue.

Try as she might, she has no chance
for your eyes are more beautiful than the dance
of wildflowers in the summer wind.
Deeper than any ocean, and more radiant than the sun.
Your eyes just cannot be outdone.

I am caught now, there is no escape.
Not that I want to, for I just need to take
this time to look into the eyes of my true love.
Your eyes have caught me There is no doubt.
I love you girl with all my heart.

Author's Note

A silly little love poem for my baby. <3

Reviews

[C.]

Interesting poem. Some parts I really liked and some parts I didn't. When the rhyme breaks in s1, l4 it sounds beautiful. But then when it's brought back in other places I find it a little too namby-pamby. Also, the tone changes from formal to informal and from near-Shakespearean to almost-slang at parts. I didn't much care for that. Overall, however, I appreciate your courage in tackling a love-poem: very personal and also very difficult. That said, I think you pulled it off fairly well. I especially admired your decision to pick one item (the eyes) as a symbol but also as simply themselves for their own sake. Classy.

[Sharon Ann]

I really saw the dance of the wildflowers in the summer wind. Moving.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

You can never compare the beauty of the woman you love to anything, she'll win every time... simple words of love expressed here, those are the most sincere kind.

[Linzey]

i truly like this poem. I usually don't like rhyming ones but this made me smile as I read it. I hope ur "baby" likes it as well :)

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. ohhhh ... beautiful ...

[ClosingAccount]

Just so beautifully written!

[the_kate]

Wow. What a great poem! Beautiful wording and really deep.

[JanieB]

I absolutely love this poem. Very well written.

eyes are the window to the soul, someone pretty much said to me recently.
and I have to agree.

I hope you actually showed this to your gal. :)

[Lola Nation]

very sweet.

[Katherine Wyatt]

a beautiful piece with a lovely classical format