Life in the Darkness

Anyone who has been where I have been, will get this. And maybe one other on here.

Cavernous, yet a tight fit

Busy, yet strangely calming

Seen, yet unseen

Boredom broken by instances of terror

Acknowledged, yet denied.

A goal that takes forever to reach,

And when reached, leads to failure.

Author's Note

Just a small taste of what it is like to be underwater on a submarine.

Reviews

[Tom]

Intriguing, you depict a voyage within a submersed submarine with such surreal, creative, poetic imagery, in such a short write!

Splendid !

[Topaz]

I read your poem before I read your preface. It was a mystery as to what you were alluding to but it makes sense, and one would never find me in one voluntarily :) I enjoyed your poem, the vagueness left much to the imagination.

[Justaguy]

I am very glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for taking the time to read. There are some references in there, that after looking back at it, only another sub sailor would get. If you are interested, I can explain some of it, or you have leave the mystery floating...lol

[SarahLin]

One can experience some of these feelings in the confines of a 'relationship' as well..'acknowledged yet denied' 'boredom broken by instances of terror '

[Justaguy]

I agree with that. I wrote it thinking of my past experience, but it sure could be used to describe relationship feelings. Thank you Sarah!

[melissa]

i like this short and sweet:)

[Justaguy]

Thank you!

[melissa]

welcome:)!

[Sasha]

seems like a very nice feeling !
nice one!

[Justaguy]

I did it for a long time. It is strangely calming.

[SyberRose]

Nicely done...I lived in Hawaii and I had the opportunity to tour a sub...and I could have never lived on one...
tight quarters for sure...no elbow room ha...i also went to a wedding on top of one...Rose

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for penning...:)

[Justaguy]

Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Justaguy]

Roll Tide!

[Sami Khalil]

Roll tide , roll...:)

[icelandicblue]

I've actually been on a nuclear sub but it was being repaired so it was above the water. We were restricted from the nuclear part though. The quarters alone are incredibly claustrophobic, the men sleep on shelves underneath each other that reminded me of a morgue. Take all that and submerge it and you've got your poem. Nicely done.

[Justaguy]

Thank you. So you have seen the inside. You are one of only a few. I spend many months at a time under water.

[icelandicblue]

Yes, it really was quite an experience. We toured in in New London, my friend's brother was the captain at the time. The largest items on the sub were the captain's quarters (palatial by comparison) and the television. I can't imagine being submerged for months on end or knowing you were below the polar icecap!

[Justaguy]

It is interesting for sure. I was on missile subs. So a little bigger

[Corset]

I can only imagine the monotony even as much as I like the water, ocean. Navy vet? great poem :) This would have been a great "what am I" riddle but also glad for the give away else i'd be occupied for hours with the riddle :)

[Justaguy]

Glad I didn't keep you wondering for the while weekend!...lol

[Corset]

me too , I'd have gotten little else done :)

[ron]

Interesting write. Simple with few words that say so much.

[Justaguy]

Thanks Ron. Glad you enjoyed it. And thanks for taking the time.

[ron]

Your welcome.