Just Like Tigger and Pooh

For my Best Friend

Best Friends Forever, is what we promised,
That was 11 years ago.
You've always been my shoulder to lean on,
And your only reply is "thats what best friends are for."
Just like Tigger and Pooh.

Best Friends Forever, is what we promised,
and to this day, its just as strong.
I wish i could show you how much it means to me,
That you've never left me alone.
Just like Tigger and Pooh.

Best Friends Forever, is what we promised,
but words seem so trivial.
Yet these are just words, just simple words writen for you,
But its the only way I know how to explain.
Just like Tigger and Pooh.

Author's Note

She'll understand when she reads it...well she should. lol
If she doesnt, she's going to be really creeped out. hahaha

Reviews

[M. Amphet Salt]

This is a good piece from a friend to a friend and you do a wonderful job showing how much you care about tigger. I have yet to write a poem for a friend, so.

Grammer and Mechanics time, Pooh!

In the first lines of each stanza eliminate the commas. A comma serves several purposes. One is the fanboy concept. Which means that a comma should be used as such; , for , as , nor , but , or , yet. The other major use for a comma is to seperate a dependant clause from an independent clause to keep from having a run on sentence. a dependant clause is an incomplete sentence that can be connected to a complete sentence. Well its a simple way to think of it. There are a couple of other reasons to use them, but I'd have to pull out the book, lol.

Remove the comma in third line of the first stanza

"thats what best friends are for." thats= that's and remove the period

In the first two lines of the second stanza take out all commas.

Remove the period in the fourth line so that it flows with the fifth. Or a comma would work there.

Third line, third stanza I think you meant written for writen and in the fourth line change the period to a comma if you done so by advice in the other stanza, otherwise you should remove it.

I hope that this helps. You may mail me here at the cafe if you have any questions.

[17thWhitePrince]

Wow ... very very nice ... what a SWEEET poem indeed :) :D

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

wow i liked it...it reminds me of me and my best friend...lol
Great Job :)