What Happend?

I have no idea...it just popped in to my head...but as i started writing it, it reminded me more and more of my sister's (recent) ex boyfriend.

You broke my heart without a single thought,
now you ask to piece it back together?
You ripped my life apart at the seams,
now you say you have a needle and thread?
You said the words "i love you", to me and so many others,
now you say it wasn't a lie?

I am no fool,
you will never capture me again.
I am free from you,
you will never be able to control me again.
I will never think of you and cry again,
you cannot hurt me any longer.

 

Author's Note

I know this isnt my best, but oh well.

Reviews

[M. Amphet Salt]

It has alot of feeling to it. It shows strength and realization, and internal awakening. I like how you Cap all of your statement of I and lower case all of the you and nows, as if you are saying that you are a better and bigger person for how you have been treated. Good write...

Now are you ready for the grammer, ect?

Peice= piece
Seems= Seam Seem is a state of being/ Seam is where something has been stitched together.
Unless it is for effect capitalize the I in "i love you"

[** LIVE LOVE **]

Every piece of work you write may not seem to you to be your best, but
Every word that comes from us
comes from a place of strength and a feeling of you! ~ Just :+)

[Bran the Broken]

again, simple, honest words, with a very tangible and real emotion. interesting that you wrote this as if from your sisters perspective

[Vaishali..^_^]

it's really beautiful ...!!so emotional...
and very well written..!!
great work...^_^