Invisible

I wrote this poem awhile back. But i thought I'd post it.

Does anyone see me? 

Does anyone hear me?

I feel like nobody is there... 

Like i'm invisible. 

Because nobody seems to 

"come to my rescue." 

I hate this... 

I hate this so much. 

I scream, and I yell. 

And yet... 

Nobody hears me. 

I am invisible. 

All i want is to be seen...

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

Really visceral and well written poem.

It would have more visual impact written thusly:

Does anyone see me?
Does anyone hear me?
I feel like nobody is there...
like i'm invisible.
Because nobody seems to
"come to my rescue."
I hate this...
I hate this so much.
I scream, and I yell.
And yet...
nobody hears me.
I am invisible.
All i want is to be seen...

[Jordan Varner]

MomzillaNC, once again, thank you for your review and constructive criticism. I didn't really think to put my poem in that format. But it is a very good idea, and i agree that that would make it have a bigger visual impact.

[MomzillaNC]

I'm glad I could help. I really like your prose.

[Jordan Varner]

Thank you. :)

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[micky]

This is a feeling I can relate to honestly. Well done it is a lovely piece ;p

[Jordan Varner]

once again, thank you micky. :)