Alone

This is a very personal poem about how i feel, and how many people feel.

I hear their voices:

"It'll all be okay in the end... I promise.

Trust me: I've been there.

I know how you feel."

No.

You do not know how I feel.

I feel so alone...

So... so empty.

But I'm gonna push on.

Fight.

Because I have people who love me.

Things I need to do.

So I'll just swallow my feelings,

And I'll pretend I'm okay.

And I'll hope that someday...

It'll get better...

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

Moving and poignant and true. No one can ever know how another person feels in their moments of pain, doubt, and isolation. Just because you've felt those things doesn't mean you can "know" what someone else is feeling in those situations. You may empathize or sympathize with them; but each person's experience is unique.

Minor edit: Seems like the second line should be two lines, written thusly:
"It'll all be okay in the end…
I promise."

Also, lines two through four should all be in quotation marks as they are spoken to the narrator.

[Jordan Varner]

MomzillaNC, thank you for that review. You completely got the point that i was trying to reach with this poem. And that makes me ecstatic, because generally people do not understand my points. I left the second line as one line so that i the poem could be divided up into four sections of four lines. I also left out the quotation marks because i didn't feel that they were needed, as I was leaving it as more of a flashback: the narrator thinking about what they said, instead of just a straightforward quote. But, thank you for the feedback. I will correct the quotations. Have a great day!

[MomzillaNC]

I understand that point about the flashback. It's actually a common literary device. However, those flashbacks are usually italicized to set them apart as different or not the narrator's voice or as a memory. I agree that quotes might not be the best interpretive device to do that.

[micky]

Your writing is so beautiful and elegant and yet simple. Well done ;p

[Jordan Varner]

god, micky, you're making me blush. ;) haha

[micky]

I hope it's a proud blush;) You really are talented and should never stop writing :}

[Jordan Varner]

micky... you really have no idea how much i appreciate you saying that. as you can probably deduct from my writing, i have low self-esteem and depression issues, and you're making me feel so accomplished, and i'm so happy. thank you.

[micky]

Your welcome I might only be 15 but that means nothing to me for my mind has been through much and I promise you don't have to feel insecure about your writing it is wounderful

[Jordan Varner]

:) you writing is amazing as well.