There is a sense of innocence adorning this piece that enhances its talent, and its charming qualities. The words are a wine or a fine vinyl that speaks to our emotions, and its driving humanistic quality is excellent. It is a beautiful poem with a lot of substance.
Well, it is said that is greener on the other side, what if once you get to the unknown they slave you because you have no knowledge and you are putting yourself at their mercy, maybe you should do research and send disposable people there first, like important people not just anybody from the street.
This is breath-taking. Like a movie about war where you have nowhere to run but a small unexpected world which is less dangerous. The only thing you should hold on is your courage.
Nice use of words...the rhyme is good.
Good job!
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much, your review is very encouraging :)
There is a sense of innocence adorning this piece that enhances its talent, and its charming qualities. The words are a wine or a fine vinyl that speaks to our emotions, and its driving humanistic quality is excellent. It is a beautiful poem with a lot of substance.
I'm 17 years old. Novice. I absolutely love writing, and I look forward to publishing things in hopes of constructive feedback.
"You must stay drunk on writing, so reality cannot destroy you." -R.. more..