One Day Away

I can nearly hear your soul

It rumbles like a storm.

I feel it when we collide

It batters me like a hurricane,

Meeting the shore.

You move so quickly that I stumble,

Buffered by the wind you stir up.

No part of you is made from solid ground

You're an intangible being, like the sky.

I pray for a sign, a miracle,

Something to help me handle you.

Yet over and over I return

The helpless child drawn to the flame

Reaching toward familiar fire

Only to feel the same old burn, and shame.

There is no lesson to be learned

It is no life,

But it is mine.

Reviews

[Dearantlers]

This is really good. You are a really good writer!

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This is so amazing!!!
I loved this one, really liked how you summed it up
at the end. Wonderful brillant write.

[AndyJCash]

Favourite stanza is definitely the second, the use of imagery and the weather is incredible. Brilliant stuff!

[MAC]

6th stanza is incredible and completely makes this piece. excellent write...leaves me wanting to read more from you.

[yashsickle]

Wow..so much great imagery. These words clash together like giant waves on mountains. "No part of you is made from solid ground." I love it. Great job! Happy to see new talent!