Kindergarden

I remember back on the first day of kindergarden. My mother dressed me in cute little clothes and took alot of pictures but thats not part of my story. My story is all about true love, and great friendships. IT all starts on the first day of Kindergarden at SunnySide. I climbed onto  the big yellow school bus with my superman lunchbox and backpack. I sat near the middle by myself. Around me all the other kids were pairing up and making friends. I sat alone, hoping at school I would find more people to be friends with. I heard all the kids laughing and saw them pointing at me. A quick tear rolled down my cheek.

"HA! Look he's crying. What a baby." I heard one say. Suddenly i felt someone beside me. I looked up, scared iy was another bully. But it was a girl my age. She was smiling a Slight, friendly smile at me.

"Hi, im Victoria. Don't listen to them." She smiled again. I smiled back, i thought she was cute with her blue eye, freckles, and her Brown hair in pig tails. But i alos thought she had cooties.

"Hi...im uh...im Noah." When we got to school i found out that she was in my class. We walked together and sat at the same desk. That day we learned about Butterflies and we needed a project partner and guess what? She was mine. Through out Kindergarden, she was my only friend. One day i invited her over to play.

"Hi Tori." I smiled as she sat by me on the bus.

"Hey Noah."

"Can you come over after school? I mean, would you want to?" I asked nervously looking down at my shoes. She smiled and put her hand on my shoulder.

"That sounds fun."  The whole day i figgeted, excitedly. Finally my mother picked up both up.

"Hi Tori, Noah. How was school?" She smiled as we ate our snack.

"Good, come on Tori, ill show you my room!" I pulled her arm. WE ran up the stairs into my room. She spun around and laughed.

"This is such a cool room!" She laughed. WE played house and we were the parents. This is when i first knew i couldnt live with out Victorica.

"Bye Honey." She said, pretending to be the mom. "Arent you going to kiss me before you leave for work?" She smiled at me as i puckered up my lips and kissed her cheek. Considering i had never done that before, i did pretty good.

The next day on the bus i took my normal seat on the bus, but Tori didn't she walked on past me. I spun around in my chair to find her with all the mean bullies.

"Turn around, dummy!" One yelled, i think it might have been Tori. Another cheek rolled down my cheek. That is when i learned that not only did i need tori, but she never would like a friendless loser like me. 

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[[Kaytken]]

I hope I'm not getting too irritating.

alot of pictures but thats not part of my story. ---> a lot of pictures, but that's not part of my story.
i felt someone beside me. I looked up, scared iy was another bully. But it was a girl my age. ---> I felt someone beside me. I looked up, scared that it was another bully, but it was a girl my age.
im Victoria. ---> I'm Victoria.
i thought she was cute ---> I thought she was cute
pig tails. But i alos thought ---> pig tails, but I also thought
im uh...im Noah." When we got to school i found out ---> I'm uh, I'm Noah." When we got to school I found out
day i invited her over ---> day I invited her over
i figgeted, excitedly. ---> I fidgeted excitedly.
mother picked up both up. ---> mother picked us both up.
ill show you my room ---> I'll show you my room
when i first knew i couldnt live ---> when I first knew I couldn't live
"Arent you going ---> "Aren't you going
at me as i puckered ---> at me as I puckered
Considering i had never done that before, i did pretty good. ---> Considering that I had never done that before, I did pretty well.
the bus i took my --->the bus I took my
i think it might have ---> I think it might have
Another cheek rolled down my cheek. ---> Another tear rolled down my cheek.
i learned that not only did i need tori ---> I learned that not only did I need Tori

Keep up the hard work.

[Rainbow Rider]

Okay, I should have started here. The opening paragraph is what I was talking about in the other post. You are using great discriptives here, try doing that more as you write. But again, the spelling? Use spell check, I would be lost without it myself. Spell check will also catch the misplaced CAPS. Keep writing , this is an interesting read so far.