Vanilla Taste

Swathe me in shackles
Seize my fame
Be driven savage
With the scent of my flame

Reveal my tenderness
With strength and pain
This isn't abuse
Just a noble act

I'll sport cupid's mark
In a freakish fashion
Other lovers differ
But I know this passion

Regret nothing

Fear nothing
Let me takes its place

In the sweet taste of nectar

Or the vanilla flame

 

Stricken, Driven mad
Like the hound in heat
Force your fall
To your hands and knees

Crazed over possesion of me

Wanting a never land of your own

With my sweet taste of vanilla

Disconnected lover
Give me some grease
Give me words

Give you taste

You think " what a  waste"

A precious vanilla taste

Slather me with skin
In feverish frenzy
You'll savor a flavor
Where vanilla's obscene

 

Author's Note

Tell me what i should add or take out
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Reviews

[the in between]

:O wow......... ... loved it.. thats all a can think of because it blew me away.. great poem :)!!

[FlawedByDesign]

"Swathe me in shackles
Seize my fame
Be driven savage
With the scent of my flame" - This drew me right in, I wanted to read more. You certainly did not waste time in getting the poem going. It started off with intrigue and tasteful foreplay with the shackling, as metaphorical as it may be.

The taste of vanilla is a great inclusion, it being a rather tender, smooth yet an unforgettable scent.

Nicely done.

[Fernando Pessoa]

In your vanilla world you've got a lot of passionate power, and your writing really hits it hard. It's the kind of poetry I can read again and again, and love it every time for a different reason.

Sydney Smith: “Ah, you flavor everything; you are the vanilla of society."

[Jonathan Ballam]

Interesting tangle of emotions, and tumbling words that reveal a very delicate eye for the unseen. In other words...you've surely got talent gal!

One simple tip to mastering poetry, is read more poems that you write. Make sure they're legitimate and published poets too.

Poetry is the core too all good writing, IMO. Pity it's murdered so much under the school system :(

Keep it up!

[Tony]

I'll just enjoy.
Art needs no touchup.

[Steve]

Man!!! Very nice! You seem older than 16 Lexi......this was stimulating......

[Allison]

U r an amazing writer! I really liked this one. It's totally crazy and just kind of abstract where you have to figure it out on your own.

[Drifter]

I rather like the first stanza. Of all the things I've read today (and that has been quite a bit) it is perhaps the most catchy four lines. I concur with other assessments; nothing really needs to be added to it.

[Darruesh Eetraydes]

This piece captured me and didn't let go. You have talent. Great job

[Reks]

Lexi, your writing has truly amazing. The way the words flowed from your fingers totally drew me in. I'm not much for poetry after going through as phase with dark poems, but something about this relit my passion for writing