Damnit.

Perfect, he was perfect,
Amazing, super awesome
I'm an a*****e idiot
Absolutely loathsome

Together we made greatness
But always feared the win
Together we made miracles
(what some would call a sin)

Sweet, he was so sweet,
Always doting, charming
I just ripped and teased
Kept trying to disarm him..

Together we were power
Thinking, sceming, dreaming
Together we were one being
Each look so full of meaning

Heeding my request
this boy has left me dry
If this is what I wanted
then why now do I cry

Reviews

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I really liked this! The way you brought to light the yin and yan emotions of the two people really worked well! It's rhymes were smooth and it gave us a look at one of the issues that plagues relationships. Makes us think!

One thing I noticed... Stanza 4, Line 2... (sc(h)eming) needs an "h" *Smiles*

Great ink!
*Hugs!* - Tara

[lovely, just]

Thanks for any good/bad reviews. Happy to share, hoping to amuse. Occasionally I will produce something worth reading. Promise.

[emmah]

its nifty expression....the flurry of awesomeness and the tinge of regret from the narrator are nicely brought out.... :) :) :)