Sociopath

Her words were honeyed,

Her smile sweet.

Her eyes held a glint,

Her hand held a treat.

Her temperament varied,

Her actions sporadic,

Her conscience was buried,

Her movements mechanic.

Her mind was clear,

Her nerve concrete,

The body lying there,

Pooled blood at her feet.

. . .

. . .

. . .

 

Her shoes were ruined... How sad.

 

 

 2nd - Sociopath, All Around contest writing contest

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Reviews

[Darkest Rose]

Oh my god I love this.It's one of your best pieces so far,I love how it flows and works together so well 'Her words were honied,her smile sweet.Her eyes held a glint,her hand held a treat' Love that first part the most,it's like the rest of the poem but it stands out to me :)
Another piece of amazing writing for you Jazz! Keep up the fab work :)

[Helen Crutchett]

Amazing poem JJ. You have described a 'sociopath' to a T! Its chilling to even think about how devoid of feeling and needing the social contact with people and even killing without the slightest bit of remorse. Well done! Thank you for "Keeping the Dream Alive"!

[Stabitha]

The last line is a triumph!!

[Marie Harrison]

Fabulous write.
You've described a sociopath alright.
Nice job!

[Alewis]

o-m-g this was bery good indeed :) i especially love the last line about her shoes that really topped it off for me :) great job

[falling_toxic_rain]

yes this killer does seem to have the antisocial personality disorder if that's were you were trying to get at. hm, not many people can actually portray in such a matter because, well its hard for many to think in this way. however this is a really good write, :) i like it.

[HalfBloodPrincess]

You are so talented I wish I could write as well

[Trinity]

This piece is really great! It depicts perfectly a sadistic killer with no heart whatsoever. The picture grew and grew in my mind until the very end when I saw the bloodstained shoes in my mind. The rhymes are excellent and everything fits together so well. I love this one, I really do. It's perfect.