The Facade

For I am surrounded.

Darkness cloaking me on all sides.

Blinded by not what is there, but what I refuse to see.

Pain thrashing me, breaking me. Yet I give in to surrender, sweet surrender.

Rip the flesh from my bones.

The pain invigorates me, the blood desensitizes me.

The façade is melting.

The heat of their suspicion giving way to reality, baring what lies beneath the surface.

I am not what I am.

Reviews

[ShameemAkhtar]

Excellent choice of title.

You have some excellent lines in there and I like how your portray the facade in almost all your lines

Even though the poem is dark, I still see positive in it, I see control in there
Blinded by not what is there, but what you refuse to see
The pain invigorates me
I give in to surrender, sweet surrender

Intriguing use negatives through and through and interesting use of 'what' in the last line.
I am not what I am (instead of I am not who I am)

Only thing that bemuses me is the beginning:
'For I am surrounded'. Why not straight 'I am surrounded'? The 'for' makes it look like we are joining in the middle and breaks the flow somehow. Or is it I am missing something here.

Short but powerful poem.

[Daytonight]

Great write. Very dark. Keep on penning.

[Marie Harrison]

Very dark and menacing poem
Nice!

[LochnezzMonster]

I like your style of writing. Mostly because of you imagination. The gore of it is so blunt and...(how to describe it) visually correct? If that makes sense. I doubt you've ever experince the things you've wrotten about within the poem but it's so 'visually correct' that it holds and captures me, the reader.

[WritersSoul]

I am very related to this poem,
"Blinded by not what is there, but what I refuse to see."
I am like that, dont wanna see what is actually there :(
Anyway, this is a great piece :)

[BlueLagoon]

Sweet poem. Like the other reviewer the subject resonated with me also. I can tell you're a deep, descriptive, and pensive writer; writers with those qualities always produce splendidly thoughtful pieces. I look forward to your future works.

[Review]

I know I've felt like this, having your friends find out that you were never who they thought you were.
Good job! Keep writing!
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[Niki Wilson]

Good write!