Blinding Darkness

There are two types of people.

Ones that go through a tunnel,

And focus on the light they're headed towards,

The there are those who freeze to only see darkness.

I'm one of the last ones.

~

Sometimes,

In the middle of the day,

I get consumed by my own darkness.

It wasn't always this way,

~

My life used to be bright and vibrant,

Then I was hit with a bullet of obstacles and I started bleeding.

I tried covering it up and realized that dumb saying,

"bandages don't fix bullet holes" was true.

Still, I put on a brave face for everyone to see,

For if they saw the darkness I feel,

Would they still love me for me?

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This is a deeply powerful poem! The message is strong, the flow is beautiful, and the progression is brilliantly constructed! Wow! I have no doubt that many people would relate to this - the emotion really tugs at the heart and vents the pain. I felt this! Way - to - Go! Much enjoyed! If you don't mind my saying, the only things I would suggest to help improve this is:

- "And focus on the light ahead" (sounds and flows better...not too wordy).
- "Then there are those....." (typo)
- "I am one of them" or " I am part of the second group" (better flow and sound)
- Stanza 3 Line 2, no need for a second "I" (flows and sounds better).

This is otherwise fantastic! Well freaking done!

[00000000000000000000000..]

Loved this:) I not picking so please don't take that way but you left out the letter n for then on 4th line. Again not being what most be here ok:) I can tell you this we seem to want to hide and never show but we will burn inside due to our on afterglow. People will love if they have a beauty within so yeah:)

[Re-Pete]

powerfully honest. we never know what crosses people bear which is why kindness and compassion are always the order of the day. hoping a little sun shines down upon you. nice job ... :)

[RunawayWriter]

Thank you!