Sleep.

Sure I am tired but I can't sleep,
you see this tired isn't from a lack of rest,
this tired will never disappear with earlier nights or later mornings,
this tired is eating away at me,
this tired is making me cry myself to sleep pathetically every night,
and begging me to stay in bed every morning.
This tired is constantly telling me that nobody cares,
nobody understands,
and nobody sees the pain I've always kept locked up,
this tired is becoming a problem because all those chains have rusted,
the locks have been broken,
and I can't keep it in any longer.
But don't tell anyone I told you this,
 I not supposed to talk about it,
'cause I'm just "seeking attention"
 right?
 

Reviews

[therealtadkent]

I can feel the exhaustion. Everyone on here is going to say "nice words, you're so talented, blah-blah". And they're right, but it's more than that. The most important thing about writing pieces like this is that the emotion and message you're sending is not only relatable, but it's like you're reading someone's thoughts and feelings back to them. THAT is when people care, and THAT is what you have done here. Absolutely lovely. Don't be a stranger.

[RunawayWriter]

This review genuinely touched me, thank you for your kind words!

[therealtadkent]

Hah, phrasing.
And you're welcome.

[sinNsincerity]

U-N-I both. My body gets heavier every moment.

[Another Relic]

I'm sorry to read your life is a mess. Often times, a way out of it is vague and illusive. Time even looks like an enemy. But time is the only option. Things must work themselves out somehow. I wish you luck.

[Ian Craven]

This piece is like cold wind blowing against the body until the bones are numb.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I can totally relate to this composition.. Good job☺

[Adam Adams]

seeking attention? nice. intriguing. metaphorically perfect, & creatively well narrated. it's not insomnia you talkin' 'bout, but something more that none can explain. it's seemed more like a dilemma that we all sometimes pass throu' either with or without happiness. very deep poetry here. perfectly perfect!