Blank Room

Stuck in a room for 6 months. How is this supposed to help? Blank walls. Blank Ceiling. Blank floor. Blank mind? This mind is anything but blank. This heart is broken. This soul is numb. What is all this to accomplish. In boot camp they try to break you down so they can build you back up in their image. Took them 3 months to figure it out, but they did. Fumbling with the combination lock on the footlocker, trying to ignore the salty tears dripping off the tip of my nose, rolling to the corner of my lips, as she lectured me. Every word like a punch in the stomach. What was taught? How to manipulate people like a pro. Sociopathic. Those are the thoughts, the memories that come festering to the surface in this blank room. Blank room. Blank door. The only way out is through a thick windowless, metal door that looked sturdy enough to hold the Hulk. Now way out the door unless you can fit on the food tray. Drink me. Eat this. If only this was Wonderland. The hand that slides the white tray in looks like a man’s hand. The hinges creak and I scurry to try to catch a glimpse through the thin opening. A thumb. Short nails, ragged cuticles, large knuckle and dry cracked skin. He needs some lotion.

“You need some lotion”

No response from the thumb of course. The thumb is not allowed to talk to me, or maybe Thumbkin is somewhat of a snob and too good to talk to me.

Reviews

[BeanHead:)]

CHA-CHING!! that hit the spot with a creative idea and awesome structured sentences. When you said that "they were trying to break down you" and the sentence after that was this: " Fumbling with the combination lock." well that part would have made a great metaphor. It would also make the sotry stand out even more than it already is. Also i love the thumb bit. It was hilarious and mysterious at the same time. I dont know which one was more, but it surely was GREAT!

[Daydreamer54]

yeah i do see that she's a bit crazy....:P Great beginning and description of things. i wonder how she ended up there.
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