I WIll Remember

This was inspired by the messed up way of life...

Green the grass,

Blue the sky,

And cold the air around me.

Golden sunlight streaming down,

As leaves fall down beside me.

Fall is color,

Color is life,

And cold is the killer that takes it.

People live,

People die,

And angels recycle.

Happy children,

Warm in their jackets,

Play as the sun begins to set.

Homeless children,

Shivering, cold,

Search for their next meal,

And shelter.

Some are content with the way things are.

Those people are heartless, and I’m sure they have homes,

And have never gone a day without food,

Or have ever had to sleep in an alley.

I will remember,

The happy,

The beautiful,

And the sad,

Ways of life.

 

Reviews

[Audrey Howitt]

I agree, powerful contrast between nature's colors and the want of homeless people adds a lot of depth to this poem. I often wonder what the soul recalls of living. Your poem brought that question to my mind.

[Just Brooke]

Captivating Imagery! Very powerful and gets the reader thinking. Also very constructive. I loved it!

[Sweet & Tender Hooligan]

Beautiful imagery and thought provoking wording. A powerful and gorgeous poem.

[Desert Dreamer]

The contrast between the colors of nature and these homeless people add huge depth to this writing. We all deserve food, shelter and happiness. We need to remember the homeless, very well written.

[reb]

Julie,
Your reviews are mostly focused on your grammar and spelling. Be more careful. I love you. Mom

[Havatara]

Golden has one l.
Homeless has an e.
I'm is capitalized and has an apostrophe.
I'm sure that you didn't send this to me to correct your spelling, but that's just what popped out to me. It's a beautiful poem, with the right amounts of sadness and happiness. It was great.

[.]

I really liked this! =) Life hands us all different places along the road from low to high. We are all on the road, but we know that there are those above and those below where we stand. I love how this poem makes us remember to keep in our thoughts those beneath were we fall and to remember that those above us aren't so terrible.
Fantastic poem! xD

Kisses - Ash

[Dreamer<3]

I agree with -darkgurl-
(:

[darkgurl]

Makes one think, very nicely written and said.

[James Paulin]

You have important things to say and a great sense of form to leverage emphasis.
This poem has a strong foundation. More techniques are possible but they will come in time. Well done.