A SOUND ACROSS THE WATER

 

 

 A Sound Across the Water

 

As I stood upon the brink of life

And looked into the murky depths

I knew my soul would soon be lost

By taking one more faltering step

 

And I longed so strongly for it

Nothing seemed to matter much

'till I heard a swelling chorus

In the wind and I was touched

 

There's a sound across the water

Calling me.....calling me

There's a sound across the water

Calling me.....calling me

 

So I listened to the music

On that far and distant shore

And it lifted me and set me free

To see what I'd come for

 

And the sound across the water

Set me free.....set me free

And the sound across the water

Set me free.....set me free

 

And I took that step into the dark

Knowing I would not fall

And I floated oh so gently

Towards that far off beckoning call

 

Julie Dant

Reviews

[justjenn_2u]

You seem to have reached a rock bottom of making mistakes. To continue on the mistakes, you will lose your soul - which is everything that you are. You long to see yourself fall on your face until you encounter positive energy. A feeling that washes over your body. The positive force is longing for you to come closer. You let your emotions feel for once and you go forward in your life. You have let go of the bad emotions and you feel so free, a sense of serenity engulfs you. Now you have the confidence to keep trudging forward!

[Eagle Cruagh]

I hardly know how to comment on this, intense, spiritual, emotional ?
You have all of those things in your perfectly sculpted poem.
In this writing you have demonstrated that you have let go the sordid
bounds of life, you are free.
I am terribly moved by this and still it leaves me confused, where are
you ? Where are your mind and emotions as you pen this beautiful
poem ? Brilliant writing .
My favorite !
---- Eagle Cruagh

[Michael]

good message of faith in here, i could stand to listen more. like the rhythm as well.

[Legacy]

Good Morning Julie Dant,

Beautiful Write... Intriguing, what brought you to these crossroads in life?

Isn't it amazing though, how we need to be faced with such choices in life - in order to create such wonderful writes?

Thank you very much

I Love the Title, it shadows a thousand words and direction with-in self.

Legacy

"Fill the pages with what you know - into the future, others may grow" ~Legacy

[Moonlit-Blues]

Love the echoing voice and the calling of the music. Works wonders in this poem. Lovely piece, slightly darker ending though, but the emotion is hidden in the meaning.