Bang, Bang

Just another love poem

 

The air is crisp this evening, chillier than usual this time of year

whispering through the clouds, as if there is a secret

I choose not to hear

Raising goosebumps on ivory skin

Freeing my hair

Yet, I am imprisoned

                            trapped in obscure memories

 

How I’d love to go back in history

solve the mystery

Perhaps not play so loose with the hand I was dealt

Ah… but his only purpose was to save me from another carbon copy scene

to hold me undivided

The artist, the poet, the insatiable lover

        The man

who saw soft curves,

                                manicured nails

                                                and social graces…

                           a delicate flower

 Ignoring the casualty of men and their lecherous eyes

whose terrible lies

                I wear like a disguise

                                                 my armor

 

 Refusing to see the dandelion with a pearl handled pistol

 

Reversing the roles, those wolves now slayed…

Was he just a sacrificial lamb to cleanse my dark soul

or did I truly love and lose?

 

And now, I follow behind picking up the pieces of my reality

confined, confused, and wondering wherever he is…

 

Is the wind catching his hair

setting him free?

 

           Bang, bang

Author's Note

photograph courtesy of pinterest
poetry by MsJewel

Reviews

[Wesley Dingler]

also, very awesome. i love the 357 magnum, it's a real jumper. curious though, i can't be sure myself without looking it up really but is slayed not meant to be slain? again, i'm just reading, and if need be, proofreading, and so far I love it, my lady.
I will dive into your back-catalog now.

[MsJewel]

Thanks again Wes :) Julie

[R.E. Ray]

What a photograph! How could I not read this one. And, the writing is better than the image. Your words paint a vivid image and speak in whispers, yet the reader realizes this is a strong woman. The "Bang, Bang" at the end is a playful, but chilling reminder the woman is serious. More than impressive. I look forward to reading more of your work.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Robert. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. :) Julie

[emmajoy]

You still write the most wonderful contributions to heating bills ever! Seems the dark shines brighter than the light in this post, Julie... hard hitting with a hand wearing velvet glove, perhaps. As ever a master clsass in 'how to.. ' Great phrase, ' dewdrops of desire mash me madly.. '

[MsJewel]

You are very sweet. Thanks for your lovely comment and compliment :) Julie

[Kelly Scheppers]

This gave me the feeling of an ole Hollywood noir. Great presentation, Julie!

[MsJewel]

Thank you Kelly :) Julie

[Dara]

Hmmm, a love poem with a twist of a lemon perhaps? So very intriguing and written in a wonderfully seductive manner, the markings of a true femme fatale :-) Simply awesome, Julie. Your writing has such passion and leaves me pondering the story behind it all.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Dara. It's always lovely to see you :) Julie

[JayceeC]

Great photo to add to this piece...or perhaps a prompt?.. I like the topic and theme. Women tend to grow harsh after mistreatment and too many who fail to look beyond the surface. Woman learns quickly to beat man at his own game.

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much for your kind words :) Julie

[Tabby Mac]

THIS HANDS DOWN ROCKS!! Well done! I love everything about it! I love how tantalizing you make poetry! The words you write dancing around with a whimsical confidence they tease somehow it’s so hard to explain and then they are always wrapped up with a cleverness that leaves a lingering fragrance!! I don’t know how you do it! But I absolutely love it!! BIG FAN!
Tabby

[MsJewel]

You are so sweet. Thank you for the wonderful comment and compliment. :) Julie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting, and one of my favorites ever from you---

there is a darkness in this, but also a breaking away...freeing oneself...maybe from abuse, maybe from the same hum-drum life by taking chances...
finally letting go of a bad love---being strong enough...the gun, the shooting, only figurative...
but wounding the other person emotionally because he or she never expected to be rejected...that person always the rejector or boss of the relationship...never expecting the other to fight back.
Bang Bang...you hit the bulls eye with this one Julie...

j.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your insightful comments Jacob. I appreciate you and your friendship :) Julie

[Trace]

I declare.....
At first I thought that picture was of you but then I remembered that you have an auto. Although I'm pretty sure I recognize those ...... Um..... Legs.

I love how you take the reader on a journey through your thoughts and emotions and finish with a bang
Bang.

Thanks for dragging me along down memory lane.

Huggs. T.

[MsJewel]

Big smooch and hug to you....now wipe the lipstick off your cheek. ;) Julie

[Trace]

That wasn't my cheek.
But we are ok with that. Lol.
And I don't mind your favorite shade tattoo.

[MsJewel]

lol You are too funny!

[Re-Pete]

wow. sounds like someone in "the throws of passion". made me think of, "Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned." great imagery packed with strong feeling. there is a dark, sinister, seduction in this impecccable piece penned with the softness of a woman's delicate touch. unfortunately, that touch is on a pistol handle (Lol). nice one ...

[MsJewel]

Thanks for your kind words Pete :) Julie

[Alfred Kukitz]

wow! when you go dark the light shows brilliance. a masterful piece of writing. i’m glad you visited me.

regards,
al

[MsJewel]

Thank you Al :) Julie