my god Julie, that was stark, raw and tears at the heart... the thing is too, there is such soft longing and love in the first part of the poem and then wham!! a haunting sunset... the stark reality of lost love... but it is exactly now when water is needed in this garden... I love your poetry Julie, even when it rips out my heart and stomps on it...
redzone
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
I guess life can't be all hearts and butterflies Curt. Sorry about heart stomping though...I appreci.. read moreI guess life can't be all hearts and butterflies Curt. Sorry about heart stomping though...I appreciate your wonderful comment and your support of my poetry. :) Julie
No, life is often filled with pain and suffering, heart break... no worries about the stomping Juli.. read moreNo, life is often filled with pain and suffering, heart break... no worries about the stomping Julie, not much more damage can be done. .. but what about your heart Julie?
7 Years Ago
I'm tougher than I look Curt! :)
7 Years Ago
I know Julie, to me you look like you know how to live life... but that doesn't mean it (life) doesn.. read moreI know Julie, to me you look like you know how to live life... but that doesn't mean it (life) doesn't hurt a great deal sometimes...
dear Julie... Yes, love can be like the
scent of Violet's and lavender... holding the heart of your heart ... Light as the breeze brushing your neck. "How do I love you... let me count the ways". penned by a famous poetess. Was it Emily Dickinson? Her romance(s) were sad... truly, Pat
Powerful and full of passion. One of my favorite lines is:
"Who opened the venetian blinds and let time in?"
I love how you started out with mellow undertones and gradually built up to the harsh realities surrounding the passing of time and loss. Hopefully with a new day the pain starts to fade away with the promise of a new tomorrow. This is a simply awe inspiring write!
Love the line about opening the blinds to let time in. Stunning poem Julie. When love dries up, no amount of nourishment will bring it back. That's what I take away from this. Beautiful and heartbreaking.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. I appreciate it very much :) Julie
The idea of an over saturated heart was very cool and i totally felt the frustration in the lines..
"i'm left with the stars pulling my hair..
It universally spoke when it was resolved with "to hell, to hell with it. Good fury here MsJewel, well done!
Wow. I felt the impact of this. You laid it all out. Hopefully we can tend to our wounds as we tend to our wilted hopes. A new one will flourish in due season...:)..................
wow. a powerful one. a sad, tough tragedy. i guess it's over. "To hell, to hell with it…" is very effective. there is such beauty through & through here despite the difficult nature of the piece. pic is perfect. you always do such a great job. you should be working for harlequin!
'.. while I’m left with the stars pulling my hair. '…
Pause to gasp.. to reach for a tissue.. .. .. Oh < Julie.. that is so damned real.
If any poem be considered based on truth, this has to be the one. If not, your perception, your understanding, of immense and beautiful love deserted, set aside, is extraordinary, yet painful to the core. Does that make sense.
my god Julie, that was stark, raw and tears at the heart... the thing is too, there is such soft longing and love in the first part of the poem and then wham!! a haunting sunset... the stark reality of lost love... but it is exactly now when water is needed in this garden... I love your poetry Julie, even when it rips out my heart and stomps on it...
redzone
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
I guess life can't be all hearts and butterflies Curt. Sorry about heart stomping though...I appreci.. read moreI guess life can't be all hearts and butterflies Curt. Sorry about heart stomping though...I appreciate your wonderful comment and your support of my poetry. :) Julie
No, life is often filled with pain and suffering, heart break... no worries about the stomping Juli.. read moreNo, life is often filled with pain and suffering, heart break... no worries about the stomping Julie, not much more damage can be done. .. but what about your heart Julie?
7 Years Ago
I'm tougher than I look Curt! :)
7 Years Ago
I know Julie, to me you look like you know how to live life... but that doesn't mean it (life) doesn.. read moreI know Julie, to me you look like you know how to live life... but that doesn't mean it (life) doesn't hurt a great deal sometimes...
I've been writing poetry for 25 years. My poetry isn't unique in any way, but it is written from the heart.
I have trouble keeping up with everyone's poetry, so please send me rr's.
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