Invisible Threads

~ a romantic poem written in zejel form ~

Art ~ Arthur Braginsky

~~~

My love is his, his love is mine

two hearts that beat and intertwine

in a love found to be divine

 

Invisible the binds that tie

our hearts as one, and yet I fly

carefree and light, as in the sky

tethered to him but not confined

 

Like butterflies are to a rose

the nectar’s sweet, and I suppose

a tiny taste and my heart knows

my lips have sipped the finest wine

 

So warming is this sweet embrace

as if the sun has left a trace

of sunbeams tied and softly laced

around our hearts, as they align

 

Through misty dawns and moonlit nights

together we have found delight

threaded as one, gently, yet tight

My love is his, his love is mine

~~~

 

 

Author's Note

The Zejel: The first stanza, known as the mudanza, has three lines, rhyming aaa. All the other stanzas - as many of them as you like - have 4 lines, rhyming bbba, the a rhyme harking back to the first stanza. So the overall rhyming scheme for the poem is aaa/bbba/ccca/ddda/... with 8 or 9 syllables per line but this is not required

Reviews

[apennylate]

Incredible... You have a mastery of breath and rhyme control that puts most to shame... Your syllable usage, and the way each line magically ties up at the end, as if by some gigantic invisible hand... Stunning... To say the least... Not to mention the divine word choice, and heart wrenching landscape of emotion made... Perfectly penned...

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind and generous words :) Julie

[apennylate]

You are welcome...

[TL Boehm]

beautifully written, romantic. So often poems confined to a mechanical or technical convention become stilted - perhaps because poets have become undisciplined? But this flows with elegance. Lovely work!

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much :) Julie

[barleygirl]

Always fun to find out about new poetry forms & watch how it can be crafted. It's way too complex for me to follow (the form, I mean) & besides, reading your poem, the form doesn't even stand out a bit (a good thing). Your rhyme & rhythm are very outstanding & lend a lot to the enjoyment of this read. The message is also an authentic & original take on romantic feelings. Great imagery well described.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind and lovely words. I'm thrilled you enjoyed my poem. It really is a very simple form - just counting syllables and rhyming on the right lines. Thanks again. Julie

[redzone]

hey Julie, so nice to read you again, I have missed your romantic flare and "scribbles" as you would say... I had no idea this form existed before reading this poem and it's true what Trace says below, you make it seem so easy and carefree... enjoyable and at the same time expressing the deeply felt emotions of love/romance... I have always thought you were one of the best I have read in this regard... so once again I say thank you for your poetry Julie...

redzone

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words Curt. I hope all is well. Hugs, Julie

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you first of all for the education on the Zejel .. it sounds fun! :)
your poem is a keeper ..no doubt ..i am jealous for such love ;} it couldn't be told much better ..and the poetry reflects all the considerations you must have struggled with ..i think its beautiful ..start to finish ..well done! that V2 is itself divine says i!
E.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words. It's always lovely when you visit my page :) Julie

[Trace]

Your mastery of form poetry is unparalleled and yet you make it sound so easy and carefree.
Your talent and sensual heart shine here in this lovely little scribble for the one you love. Truly outstanding.

Trace

[MsJewel]

Thank you my handsome beast. I sure miss writing with you. xoxoxo Julie

[Trace]

I'm just a verse away.
Always here for you.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Ahhhh, there is the romantic poetry that makes me swoon. Thank you for the sigh that just escaped my lips.

[MsJewel]

Thank you sweet cowboy. :) Julie

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Julie, like butterflies are to a rose the nectar's
sweet, and I suppose a tiny taste and my heart knows my lips have sipped the finest wine... Love the idea of sunbeams tied and softly laced... You have captured the essence of desire. truly, Pat

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment my dear friend. Happy Holidays Hugs, Julie

[Patricia Wedel]

Hi Julie... I just posted a simple
Christmas poem... trying to encompass too much in a little poem. Happy Holidays... hugs, Pat

[MsJewel]

I can't wait to read it!

[Pete]

Your writing is just so smooth and elegant. It's peaceful & pacifying and whisks me away to another dimension. You are quite the masterful wordsmith. You capture mood & feeling perfectly.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind words Pete :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

When we find perfect place and person. Personal utopia we need.
"Through misty dawns and moonlit nights
together we have found delight
threaded as one, gently, yet tight
My love is his, his love is mine"
I loved the above lines. I miss the days when love was life and life was love. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your generous words John :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Julie.

[Paul Bell]

Now that is true love. Not shackled, free to roam.
But still together.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for stopping by and leaving a lovely comment. :) Julie