Invisible Threads

~ a romantic poem written in zejel form ~

Art ~ Arthur Braginsky

~~~

My love is his, his love is mine

two hearts that beat and intertwine

in a love found to be divine

 

Invisible the binds that tie

our hearts as one, and yet I fly

carefree and light, as in the sky

tethered to him but not confined

 

Like butterflies are to a rose

the nectar’s sweet, and I suppose

a tiny taste and my heart knows

my lips have sipped the finest wine

 

So warming is this sweet embrace

as if the sun has left a trace

of sunbeams tied and softly laced

around our hearts, as they align

 

Through misty dawns and moonlit nights

together we have found delight

threaded as one, gently, yet tight

My love is his, his love is mine

~~~

 

 

Author's Note

The Zejel: The first stanza, known as the mudanza, has three lines, rhyming aaa. All the other stanzas - as many of them as you like - have 4 lines, rhyming bbba, the a rhyme harking back to the first stanza. So the overall rhyming scheme for the poem is aaa/bbba/ccca/ddda/... with 8 or 9 syllables per line but this is not required

Reviews

[apennylate]

Incredible... You have a mastery of breath and rhyme control that puts most to shame... Your syllable usage, and the way each line magically ties up at the end, as if by some gigantic invisible hand... Stunning... To say the least... Not to mention the divine word choice, and heart wrenching landscape of emotion made... Perfectly penned...

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind and generous words :) Julie

[apennylate]

You are welcome...

[richieb]

Beautiful poetry entwined with balanced rhyming. Your imagery is always soft and delicate. I enjoy reading your poems and admire your unique style. You have your voice in your writings, you are an artist with words.
Blessings,
Richie b.

[MsJewel]

Richie, You are very kind. Thank you :) Julie

[Dr. Wood ?]

Don't understand a thing about stanzas but get the pattern. I have used it a few times myself. Don't you find when writing poetry that the poem dictates the pattern? This poem of yours is a gem as its subject matter marries in with this style so well. For a poet I am not great with words...I enjoyed it is what I am trying to say, you still GOT it...I have been away a while now and it was good to find your poetry again Julie

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Might try this sometime. Thanks for the lesson Julie. Now, the poem is pretty splendid and the subject and form come together well with the guidance of your fine nib.

[MsJewel]

Thank you John :) Julie

[mercy party]

Very good. I didnt read the author's note until after. as i was reading i did feel a nice clever rhyming scheme. The poem itself was very universal, it was sweet.

[MsJewel]

I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you :) Julie

[Falcon1]

Love your poetry Julie w/Lots of love for sure it's in the lines so pure. Jim Smith

[MsJewel]

Thank you Jim :) Julie

[Davidgeo]

Your writing is tight and disciplined but it's not cheesy or too cliché.

Every time it's like this or better. You're a very sound writer.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[Davidgeo]

You don't really read the reviews left by names you don't recognize do you?

[MsJewel]

I read every review. I'm just not here that often to do so.

[Eagle Cruagh]

After reading all, then reading the reviews, I have come to the conclusion that, although a raving beauty you are
and an obvious talent----
Poetry is not my thing.
What is my thing ?
You must read me more
and so what you feel.
Thank you.
---- Eagle Cruagh

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[Lydia Shutter]

Just gloriously romantic, Julie! You aced the form and the lines flow so melodically! Wonderful work. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

Thank you Lydi. Happy New Year my friend :) Julie

[James]

Oh, wow. I'm glad I stopped here today. There is so much to love about this poem, most of all I love what it says and the message it's sending out.

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thanks so much James :) Julie