Blue Dawn

~ a romantic poem written in lai form ~

 

     richard johnson art

 

 

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Quiet is the night

weaving pale moonlight

the hue

soft and oh so slight

sets my dreams in flight

of you

hold me ‘til dawn’s light

takes you from my sight

in blue

 

 

When the falling dew

sweeps the day anew

I’ll don

a dress of bright hue

a smile though not true

and on

a vision of you

I’ll find my way through

Blue Dawn

~~~

Author's Note

The Lai is a French form of poetry - each nine line verse consists of five syllable couplets seperated by a two syllable line with a rhyme pattern of a/a/b/a/a/b/a/a/b.

Reviews

[Trace]

See.. there you go again.
Being the consummate poet.
If this wasn't so dam good
I would say you were showing off....

But it is just too dam good.
You are amazing.
And this poem shows it in every line.
Crystal Blue perfection.

Huggs. Trace

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it Trace. Your comments always make my day... :) Julie

[Relic]

~ Another excellent poem Julie. The way you weave the words so naturally is always impressive. Believe it or not, you are the only poetess I've ever read that can make me smell flowers. No joke. ~

[MsJewel]

You are very sweet. Thank you for the lovely comment and compliment :) Julie

[Ruth]

So softly executed, takes the breath away...leaves a tingling in the heart and a smile that lingers :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[Eagle Cruagh]

Thanks for making it clear about you and the French poetry.
I enjoyed the verse , but never would have guessed the origins
of the style.
Engoyed the writing, Thanks.
----- Eagle Cruagh

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much :) Julie

[Eagle Cruagh]

Enjoyed (spelled correctly this time) and
come again ----- bring some more poems. OK ?

[R Smith]

wonderful poem Julie, an interesting form I never heard of before and you wrote it beautifully as always, would be nice to try this but I'm not good with forms of poetry, guess I'm just too rough at this stuff :)

[MsJewel]

I'm not that great at forms either, but this one is fairly simple. You should try it.
:) Julie

[WILDERNESS]

Amazing..... has to be one of your best. Just superb flow and the sensuous pleasure of reading it. lovely poem Julie.

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend :) Julie

[mattavelli]

This is lovely. I'd never seen this form. It looks like a fun write.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment :) Julie

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!
so romantic and beautiful..........
Blue is my almost first favorite.......you are my favorite poem.......plus i get to learn a new form.......Awesome!!!!
i loved it!!!
:)

[MsJewel]

You are very sweet. Thank you :) Julie

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem, Julie. Nice picture too. :) Rudi

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Rudi :) Julie

[Robert]

Wow. To have studied this form of poetry and be able to write such a beautiful poem, you put your work into this one and were successful. Maybe someday I will be able to study the forms of poverty as this.

[MsJewel]

This is a fairly simple form. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it :) Julie

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Such a gorgeous write, Julie...onceloved has already said what I was thinking: you have such a wonderful touch with the pen and everything you write is pure artistry - the perfect marriage between a giving muse and wonderful pen... and the sentiment you capture here is just beautifully written: your true self comes out at night, and when the dream has ended with the coming dawn, the fake smile is put in place... you know I am already a fan and each time I read I become more of one... well-done!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for supporting my little scribbles. I appreciate you and your friendship :) Julie

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My pleasure, always :) - Thomas