Blue Dawn

~ a romantic poem written in lai form ~

 

     richard johnson art

 

 

~~~

Quiet is the night

weaving pale moonlight

the hue

soft and oh so slight

sets my dreams in flight

of you

hold me ‘til dawn’s light

takes you from my sight

in blue

 

 

When the falling dew

sweeps the day anew

I’ll don

a dress of bright hue

a smile though not true

and on

a vision of you

I’ll find my way through

Blue Dawn

~~~

Author's Note

The Lai is a French form of poetry - each nine line verse consists of five syllable couplets seperated by a two syllable line with a rhyme pattern of a/a/b/a/a/b/a/a/b.

Reviews

[Trace]

See.. there you go again.
Being the consummate poet.
If this wasn't so dam good
I would say you were showing off....

But it is just too dam good.
You are amazing.
And this poem shows it in every line.
Crystal Blue perfection.

Huggs. Trace

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it Trace. Your comments always make my day... :) Julie

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed form follows function. This has a romantic sadness as it seems the protagonist is left feeling blue.

[Troy Henson]

Your writing is always so beautiful Julie and this format works in so well with your art form. Just beautiful.

[expresionsesion]

This poem was exceptional! It captivated me and sent tingles down my spine!Absolutely exceptional! The rhyme scheme was something of a heart beat. It felt as though this poem matched with mine. Thrice again, exceptional!

~Rachael

[Cassie]

Another one of your awesome writes.

[sinNsincerity]

Th five syllable works oh so well with the words you have chosen.
I love it!

[JMKane117]

A blue dawn is a very beautiful image, and makes for a great poem :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[dan]

Julie sorry for so long to review dee came home yesterday, she's better but has to heal from a broken shoulder. Your rhyme scheme in this piece is impeccable and the palpitations of love that ring most of your poetry rings loud and clear...but in a whisper...in this piece. As usual, par excellence. take care and thank you for all of your good thoughts through out Dee's inpatient stays...you are a true friend. thanks so much...dan

[MsJewel]

So sorry it took so long to thank you for this lovely review. Life seems to get in the way. You and Dee are in my prayers dear one. :) Julie

[An owl on the moon]

So soft and sensual, and the form still feels so free. Dreamish and tender, the colors bring this moonlit world to life in every beautiful way.

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thanks so much :) Julie

[emmajoy]

What style, what ease of reading! '.. hold me‘ til dawn’s light - - takes you from my sight - - in blue .. '

From graphic through form via such silky words.. lovely! Your writing never fails to satisfy, but never over-fills the plate.. So, it's inevitably gentle and relaxing.. and, inevitably romanitc. What more can a review ask for!

(I've learned something new, too, wasn't aware of the Lai.. Thank you for that.)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind words :) Julie