Like a Poem

~ a collaboration by Trace and MsJewel ~

 What you were looking for, and what you found in me, and what you see, is just the sun at dawn...Reinfried Marass

 

 

                

 

                    She is eternal youth

                rising with the sun…at dawn

                fresh as the morning light...

 

                Innocently floating upon the linen clouds

                towards a destination once unknown

                now captured in the moment of her being

 

                Like a poem

                written in satin scented script

                flowing with the love of whispers on the wind,

                      she is a melody,

                                          not to be held

                            but seized for an instant

                in the shadows of a recollection once forgotten

                           yet, never growing old

 

                She is eternal youth

                                        caught only in a memory

 

Author's Note

photography ~ Reinfried Marass
poetry ~ Trace and MsJewel

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, for me, this is the way we see ourselves. We are still in high school....aren't we? We are still 18 and we are still ready for anything.....unfortunately not true, but the way we see ourselves sometimes. Of course, I have a feeling this could be about your daughter. In any case, this is well written and the imagery is lovely. I liked the change in margins. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

Thank you Lydi :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved the complete poem.
"she is a melody,
not to be held
but seized for an instant
in the shadows of a recollection once "
Your create beautiful place and create good visions and thoughts. The gentle flow of the poem allowed the reader to fall into the outstanding words dear friend.
Coyote

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much my sweet friend :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Julie.

[JayceeC]

Trace did a great job making the words float down the page. It was a lovely visual, but I must confess to copy and pasting into plain text to analyze a bit more after the first read. I'm just one person, but find the formatting a bit distracting when I want to focus on words and meaning. But I have trouble tracking from line to line anyway.

The content is exquisitely layed out, however. It's soft and subtle in its sensuality which is a feature you share as writers, but in the end, its the message of the love captured in memory, forever young, that holds me. Every woman wants to be her, and every man wants to have her, whatever the guise she takes. I think women carry around a male version of that first, unspoiled love. Its one that we keep incased..like a snowglobe that we look at occasionally, but it mesmerizes every time.

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much for your kind words. I know Trace will appreciate them as well. :) Julie

[Al R. Arce]

Well Ms Jewel... Your poetry is like that old creek under the woods... The I used to walk on barefoot, letting the coolness of the water sooth my troubles through my feet... The creek that decades later I return to after decades of walking over asphalt is just there, waiting for me under the shade of trees... And then, I take off my shoes...

[MsJewel]

It's lovely to see you. Your comments always leave me with a smile :) Julie

[andrew mitchell]

This flowed effortlessly like the washing on the line, free flow! The lady photo just added the final dot to this lovely piece Julie Eloquent!

[MsJewel]

Thank you Andrew :) Julie

[sereenaoutloud]

oh you 2 work so well together
Just beautiful.. You both paint such a stunning picture !
Love it! :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you sweet lady! :) Julie

[Robert]

I just love your poems Julie, so true and kind. "satin scented script" really like those words you choose. Fantastic write, you never let me down.

Oops! I had got come back and edit this review, as I just saw Trace collaborated with you on this piece, so kudos to you Trace on this as equal credit goes to you both. A lovely piece you two produced.

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Robert! :) Julie

[Michael Wright]

Nice piece overall
thank you for sharing

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Michael :) Julie

[Jamestown]

You two play the word game soooo well together:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[MsJewel]

Thank you James :) Julie

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This s such a wonderful collaboration...love the simile and metaphor, the alliteration and flow of this piece...lines 7 to 14 are my favorites; just simply beautiful comparisons... beautiful work, you two... beautiful!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment and compliment :) Julie

[Adam Adams]

"Eternal youth caught only in a memory?" Very captivating words!

It's one of my fav. writes. Your poetry dappling the tings of sensuality either on words which sounding very possessive as well. Liked the certainty of love-analogies. Love has no way to get shaped so it's true enough to claim... it's captured in poetry, cause.. it itself belongs to the poem - a very alluring poem that's always seemed to be "caught in a memory". Wondrous job!!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment and compliment. I appreciate you and your friendship :) Julie