Silent Dawn

~ just a scribble ~

         

                   photograph compliments of pinterest

 

 

Silence finds me

naked and vulnerable

 

As the morning sun

plays against the white cloud of pillows

protecting my dreams

 

I ache

to feel the warmth of your lips

your taste on mine

as you tattoo your love upon my skin

strewn with fragrant flowers

glistening at your touch

 

How I miss waking up

to the beat of your heart

legs in tangled rapture

                                 secrets

 left exposed to the moonlight

                                                naked and vulnerable

 

                                                                       silence finds me

Reviews

[Trace]

To still feel the longing and loneliness of a lover long gone,
is something only a poet can describe in verse with such beauty, simplicity and grace.

This is sensual, and seductive, yet solemn and tempered with just a hint of wistfulness.

wonderful poetry my friend

Huggs, Trace

[MsJewel]

Your comments mean the world to me Trace. Thank you sweet beast :) Julie

[Steve L.]

Wow!!!!

"I ache
to feel the warmth of your lips
your taste on mine
as you tattoo your love upon my skin"

Brilliant!! My neurons exploded with this description!

And I doesn't hurt that I have 13 tattoos!!

[Neville]

It was a real delight to stumble upon this account of love and loss, most beautifully penned.....Thanks for sharing

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely words :) Julie

[Neville]

My pleasure entirely, N

[Brian]

I want silence. Which room is she staying? lol

Outstanding. Just.. exquisite.

[MsJewel]

You are very kind. Thank you :) Julie

[Brian]

I'm far more honest than kind. Much deserved. No doubt about that. Was a joy to read. :)

[Stonz P.]

Your use of imagery is pretty good in conveying the tone of the poem.
'tattoo your love upon my skin' is a very good line..
Also, the lingering feeling of longing was a nice touch in the end.

This is just very well written to have anything to critique about.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[emmajoy]

You write such warm and passionate poems but never cheapen your creations with fleshy padding. This really is no exception and holds some beautiful phrases, '.. your taste on mine - as you tattoo your love upon my skin.. '

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind comment and compliment Emma. Have a lovely day my friend :) Julie

[emmajoy]

Smiling ten characters

[onceloved]

Truly beautiful showing the naked side of emotion for someone in ways you only know to filled with romantic and beautiful longing too. :) Larry

[MsJewel]

Thank you Larry :) Julie

[onceloved]

Your Welcome Julie.:) Larry

[Lydia Shutter]

The romantic longing is intense throughout this poem. The sense of deep loss...both physical and emotional....is honest. Beautifully written, Julie. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely words Lydi :) Julie

[Moonie]

Dear Julie ma'am,

Your imagery is spot on. Longing for a loved one is always bitter-sweet, and creeps up on you with muffled steps, much like a silent dawn. The overall lingering feel of the vulnerability the character feels is well expressed.

Your metaphors work very well. My favourite-"As the morning sun
plays against the white cloud of pillows" . It makes me visualize the risjng sun, as well as the morning rays falling on the bedspread.

Well done! :)

[MsJewel]

You are very kind. Thank you :) Julie

[MomzillaNC]

Such a beautiful poem of longing and loss. As always, you words and imagery are sensuous, romantic, and breathtakingly gentle. What tremendous and timeless love must have inspired your words?

[MsJewel]

I lost the greatest love a few years ago - he passed away very young, and very suddenly...He was a kind, generous, compassionate man - and I often write of him. I am certain he will always stay in my heart. :) Julie

[MomzillaNC]

I'm sure his memory and the love you shared will always be a comfort and inspiration to you.

[TheLostMind]

If this is just a scribble, I wonder what what an "actual poem" is :P. This is amazing poetry. Mesmerizing.. Very delicate.. The longing for his touch, his kiss has been written with astounding brilliance. Loved it.. :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[TheLostMind]

You are welcome :)