Seventeen Summers

~ a heartprint ~

art ~ luis ribas

 

 

I lost the song you wrote for me

scribbled on a paper napkin

borrowed from the ice cream stand on the boardwalk

               

I miss the warm August afternoons

strawberry swirl ice cream melting

sticky sweet on bubble gum lips…

 

only to be washed away as I danced

in the marshmallow capped waves

while you sat in the sand

strumming your guitar,

                                                blue eyes beaming

as if the ocean were your audience

 

Seventeen summers since,

I still watch the tide dance

                                                remembering

sticky sweet August afternoons

as I struggle to remember your song....

                                                                                                     

 

 

 

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"to be washed away as I danced
in the marshmallow capped waves
while you sat in the sand
strumming your guitar,
blue eyes beaming
as if the ocean were your audience"

Wow. Sooo beautiful as far as wording and imagery. Romance is dancing indeed with your tidal words...Excellent...:)......................

[MsJewel]

Thank you Sami. You are very sweet. I wrote this about my first love...I wish I could remember that song..... :) Julie

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. You are welcome...:).............

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

The green eyed monster is making an appearance on this one and its cousins too. I am envious, jealous, resentfully ticked off that you have experienced and penned such a masterpiece. I wish I could but I have found solace on my own private shore on my own isolated island. Thanks to you I may venture back to see what humanity is doing and are their any changes in the ideologies of
war.
only to be washed away as I danced
in the marshmallow capped waves
while you sat in the sand
strumming your guitar,
blue eyes beaming
as if the ocean were your audience

These lines imbued this review.

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Rico! :) Julie

[W R Stowe]

Oh it is so sweet to reminisce of times gone by, I am starting to remember all the free spirit I had and every single crush I had thanks for sharing this gem

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[W R Stowe]

and by the way "This Gem" is what you inspired me to write.your welcome
Bill

[leppero]

This is wonderful poetry, great stuff. your descriptions are great , straberry swirl, marshmallow , all those words that give the reader a good image of being by the sea. I like your voice , its not desperate or wanton, its more a matter of fact. I like the title, it fits fine with the soft subtleness of the poem

great stuff, Miss

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful artwork and words. I could use a beach and someone special. Funny how time can move so quickly. Seventeen years can seem like yesterday. Thank you dear Julie for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Julie.

[Einstein Noodle]

awwwwwwwwww! simply beautiful! a breakup that is mutual and with well wishing leaves a scene such as the memories your poem brings .. sometimes its like that .. bravo ... very fine poem
E.

[MsJewel]

Thank you! :) Julie

[Daydreamer]

Beauty all over 🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment and compliment :) Julie

[blaqpearl]

you surely are talented.
your choice of words and the way you express yourself~skillfull
i loved it

thank you for sharing

[MsJewel]

You are too kind. Thank you for your lovely review and generous compliment :) Julie

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

So beautiful, these words. Fluently, romantic, you're very good. Liked it very much. :) Rudi

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Rudi :) Julie

[Tiana]

There is something about the beach that reflects on past memories ... I live two blocks from the beach and love going for walks ... so peaceful ... Beautifully written ...

[MsJewel]

I live near the beach as well. I wouldn't live anywhere else...it is so beautifully serene and peaceful. We are lucky ladies! :) Julie

[Tiana]

Yes we are, Julie :))

[Leviathus Fortes]

Romantic summer memories.
May they never melt like ice cream.

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie