Seventeen Summers

~ a heartprint ~

art ~ luis ribas

 

 

I lost the song you wrote for me

scribbled on a paper napkin

borrowed from the ice cream stand on the boardwalk

               

I miss the warm August afternoons

strawberry swirl ice cream melting

sticky sweet on bubble gum lips…

 

only to be washed away as I danced

in the marshmallow capped waves

while you sat in the sand

strumming your guitar,

                                                blue eyes beaming

as if the ocean were your audience

 

Seventeen summers since,

I still watch the tide dance

                                                remembering

sticky sweet August afternoons

as I struggle to remember your song....

                                                                                                     

 

 

 

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"to be washed away as I danced
in the marshmallow capped waves
while you sat in the sand
strumming your guitar,
blue eyes beaming
as if the ocean were your audience"

Wow. Sooo beautiful as far as wording and imagery. Romance is dancing indeed with your tidal words...Excellent...:)......................

[MsJewel]

Thank you Sami. You are very sweet. I wrote this about my first love...I wish I could remember that song..... :) Julie

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. You are welcome...:).............

[B]

Oh this is a very sweet write
I feel like i can hear the music in it

Gorgeous

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[Terpsichore]

So fortunate to have such a beautiful memory to cherish. I loved every line, and that last stanza is quite sublime. T

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[Avinash]

My friend one thing for sure that you are one of the few human beings walking on earth who had the chance of experiencing true romance. Thanks for inviting.

[TL Boehm]

a bittersweet memory, beautiful, wistful and heart tugging.

[MsJewel]

thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[onceloved]

Very beautiful sentiments of one's first love how very beautiful innocence they can be, filled with some shy smiles, sleepiness night too? It like our first kiss it's something we all remember?? :) Larry

[MsJewel]

Thank you Larry :) Julie

[onceloved]

You are more than welcome Julie. :) Larry

[Michael G.]

It's nice to know that no matter what beach you are on, the opportunity for memories of August afternoons abound. A very lovely work.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Michael. :) Julie

[armin]

the last stanza is so beautiful, I enjoyed the read.
Great work

Spidey. ..

[MsJewel]

Thank you Spidey! :) Julie

[Siegfried]

Sweet bubble gum lips present a frosty tingle of motion, captured in salty waves. Saturated with pleasance, fantastic.

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[MomzillaNC]

Very touching. This recalls all those memories of young love.

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[MomzillaNC]

yw :)

[ANTO]

How beautifully bittersweet Julie. Truly moving writing. "..bubble gum lips" is superb and the alliteration of the title and its reprise in the last stanza drives it home that this was a very very special Summer. Im glad you let us in, here. Thank you.

[MsJewel]

It was a special summer. Thank you Anto :) Julie