Dreaming of the Sea

~ a love scribble ~

 

Lady in Moonlight ~ David Kanigan

 

 

 

The nights may pass

and yet I’m drawn

to the slow dance of tide…

white tipped waves a shimmer

                         in an ocean of liquid light

 

As quietly the moonlight casts a crown upon the sea

 

His love…though only a moment known

            was deep and peaceful

                     an ocean

     surrounding me with treasures unknown

 

I slipped into the mystery of aura light held

far from the pebbled beach

            and reality

drifting carelessly on the soft serenade of tide

 

I close my eyes

the wind gently rustling my hair

as I strain to catch the whisper of the breeze

                   only an echo…

                                    gone

 

And yet I’m drawn

to long swims in the bay

in evenings splendor

and walks in the moonlight,

                          collecting muted shells

                                         scattered

                                                   upon lonely shores

 

                                Dreaming of the sea

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

Sighs! this was soothing from beggining to end, been dawn with the liquid light, still trying to behold that but as one of my favorite concepts the scene seemed to have invoked silence. Not the kind that someone might scream at you for loudness but the kind that is a consequence of the intrisincal nature of the moment. As the sea in melody of muted waves carries through memories of peaceful times.

Oh, so soothing.

Thankyou

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[PloughBoy]

The pleasure was entirely mine, MsJewel. You're very welcome.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

This poem paints a wonderful picture in the readers mind. :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :)

[SmittyJas]

Dreaming up a beautiful sight to see walking with the love of your life splashing by the sea. Great writings
Awesome tale.

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

I love the way you shaped and formatted this piece. actually, I love everything about this. amazing job. Phenomenally penned/

[MsJewel]

You are very kind. Thank you for your lovely comment :) Julie

[KWP]

this is so fabulous ... i feel like it is a lullaby of sorts in spoken word .. it massaged my inner being and left me feeling like everything is going to be all right .. thank you x x

[B.J]

I love the ocean, and followed the ocean of Australia as much as I could, traveling our great land with my dogs. The ocean has a power to draw us in and is very soulful. You left me dreaming of the sea

[Lydia Shutter]

Absolutely dreamy. Your words are charismatic and the imagery is just stunning, Julie. You have captured every reader's heart with this one. Beguiling poetry. lydi**

[wordman]

this was enchanting Julie you painted so many dreams here

[Awakened Rose]

"His love…though only a moment known
was deep and peaceful
an ocean
surrounding me with treasures unknown"

AHHHHHHHH!! I am in love with your writing. So beautiful and touching. You are a gem. Thank you!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind comment and compliment. :) Julie

[Lily Mae]

Oh my love and I made up a place where we could go and dream. It's a place by the sea.. :) This is lovely and allowed me to dream inside your words.. Excellent write..xo

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment :) Julie

[PloughBoy]

Hardly a "scribble", MsJewel. I found it to be rather soothing, captivating, like the sounds of waves at low tide washing gently against the sandy shore...

Some wonderful examples of alliteration here, as with "liquid light", "casts a crown", and "soft serenade". Your composition and formatting ere spot-on, its cascading effect running down the page like sea water...or tears, perhaps.

No, hardly a scribble at all. I felt it was lovely~

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for your very kind comment :) Julie