With the Dawn

~ an aubade ~

            photograph compliments of pinterest

 

 

 

            With the dawn...I sigh

wishing the night could stay

and softly I could sail

on the dreams that still play

 

A time for us when love

lit up the tender skies

as storms rose deep within

and moonlight filled our eyes

 

While symphonies so sweet

swayed softer than the flow

of tides that took us where

only a secret goes

 

And when the thunder roared

the strength of his embrace

held me in safety and

warms me as I retrace

 

The beauty of his touch

my soft breathless reply

as dreams now sail away....

with the dawn...I sigh

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

six syllables for most lines .. for me you have created precious moments between lovers .. wrapped them in moonlight, oceans, storms and touch .. i wanted to make the last line of verse three
only secrets can go; and last line last verse with dawns lighting i sigh .. or something to keep the beat .. i enjoyed reading your poem "With the Dawn" .. i couldn't remember what an aubade is so had to look it up .. thank you for that! your song is gentle, romantic to beat hell and full of images, music, textures and of course ... love!
E.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment and for your suggestions. I hope you're enjoying a beautiful day :) Julie

[AprilRN1210]

so warm and tender your words float across the page and tug at my heart... such gentle beauty whispered in hushed affection and sweet heat... leaves your reader breathless and in awe... amazing write as usual ma'am... I thoroughly enjoyed..

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed this one April. Thank you for the lovely comment :) Julie

[AprilRN1210]

you're welcome ma'am.. was my pleasure as always..

[willweb]

I sit here breathless in awe of your wonderful talent. Love, pure love, sweet love, tender love always Julie, when I find a poem from you I know that is what I will find. Your words fill me with these feeling as they softly carress my heart as I read. What a beautiful world you create with words.

[MsJewel]

I am humbled by your generous comment. Thank you my sweet friend. :) Julie

[Lydia Shutter]

The romance in this one is velvety smooth and intricately lacy. Julie, this is your genre, no doubt about it. A splendid Aubade....perfect in every sense. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

Thank you Lydi. Hugs, Julie

[Steve L.]

The font is PERFECT for this poem!!! Absolutely beautiful!! You certainly have a gift for this. I am captivated by your writings.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment and compliment Steve :) Julie

[stars are far]

that was very great work, i loved the photograph is very beatiful, made me think about my wedding dream haha, im still young, but th words and the picture is great.
keep this great work up

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[Latifa]

And when the thunder roared
the strength of his embrace
held me in safety and
warms me as I retrace
I like the use of words in this piece

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend. :) Julie

[s y e]

// While symphonies so sweet
swayed softer than the flow
of tides that took us where
only a secret goes //

I think your poem just killed me and sent me to heaven. This was completely breathtaking. My word, Julie, you truly are fantastic. Hugs xo

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind comment. I appreciate you :) Julie

[Daydreamer]

A time for us when love

lit up the tender skies

as storms rose deep within

and moonlight filled our eyes

-Luminous write!Special sentiments shared in here ;)

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie