He is...(the wind)

~ a scribble ~

 

 

 

 

I feel his vibration

                                 drifting…

 

as careless as an ocean wave

as carefree as the seabirds song

that flies with him

 

teasing my hair

tickling my cheek

 

warmed with the fever of a sunny day

soft on my skin

               coaxing a smile

                                                 surrounding me

 

he is gentle

 

I reach for him

longing to hold him close

                                                 but he is inscrutable

 

I throw out my arms blindly

twirling aimlessly

                                                 I miss him

 

he rises above me

and he is fierce as he turns cold

a storm stirring the sky

                                         stinging my eyes

racing through my soul

 

 he is swift

 

I try to out run him

                                          but I decline

my legs are heavy

and my heart is  weak

 

he is strong

 

I surrender

for I am only flesh and blood

                                a woman

 

                                                and he is the wind

 

Reviews

[Frieda P]

I actually had goosebumps by the time I got to the end of this, I'm running out of adjectives for your gorgeous poetry MsJewel's....romantically teasing, I think this is thus far my favorite, perhaps it's the ocean or the wind, or just the sublime feeling I'm left with, exquisitely divine. :)

[MsJewel]

I'm so glad you enjoyed this one Frieda. Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[BL]

You have described the power of nature wrapped all around as the wind, as a man quite beautifully.

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Jullie

[Matching Socks]

Beautiful! The ending is just perfect!

[MsJewel]

Thank you lovely lady! :) Julie

[shaun36]

Nice. it is a good description on expressing your innerself thoughts of the wind. i think most of it is a true statement and its greatly expressed from another view.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Shaun :) Julie

[Daydreamer]

As usual- your delicate fragrance of poetry blossomed in!
Smooth flow and intense lines.. Loved the picture too! It's a nice one 💗

[MsJewel]

I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks so much for the lovely comment :) Julie

[Sami Khalil]

I felt the rising and falling of the waves as this relationship entails. I felt the strength and the weakness of the heart and legs. Twirling aimlessly, you convey the dance of the wind...Excellent...:)................

[MsJewel]

I appreciate your lovely comment Sami. Thank you :) Julie

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).

[Lyn Anderson]

The last lines really make this poem. Surrender, despite misgivings. Yep. That sums it up.

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[David Scott]

You pen words the reader can take as literal to a man or as symbolic to natures attribute of wind. I could relate to this as a man walking the hidden forests of the Smokey Mountains or visiting the stormy shores of the outer banks. I feel small and insignificant in these moments, yet I feel special because I can feel and appreciate the voices of nature. You give me this same experience in the poem here. Like walking into the wildness of the wind.

Yet there is such a strong relational component to this poem, I must consider this being the attributes of a love affair as well... Maybe a fantasy of a relationship beyond the reach of reality or maybe something you once enjoyed but no longer experience in the now.

Either way, or in many ways, this passionate poem was a joy to read and called me to respond with admiration and encouragement.

[MsJewel]

"Like walking in the wildness of the wind" - relationships can be like that - Thank you for your lovely and encouraging comment. I appreciate it very much :) Julie

[willweb]

This is a poem I had no choice but to read slowly, because I never wanted it to end. Beautiful again Julie. Your words are so very soft and loving and it feels so good to read you. I really enjoyed this today.

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend :) Julie

[Bhumika Devkota]

Lovely poem. I like how you wrote it and the imagery it gives is beautiful

[MsJewel]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. I appreciate it very much :) Julie

[Tom]

O to be free and unshackled from the everyday rigours of life and to again feel those enticing sea breezes as they excitingly blow through your hair, stoking the flames of passion deep within the soul ! ( think I need to get out more Julie ? )

' as careless as an ocean wave
as carefree as the seabirds song ' ...Now what a couple of lines to prove my point !

[MsJewel]

Thank you Tom :) Julie