Unveiled

~ photograph compliments of smashingshowcase ~

 

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It was simply a charade, yet in your glance

the moon and stars they rose for you and me

and petals gently fell as flowers danced

on whispers from your lips, sweet poetry

 

Veiled my eyes, weakened knees with a just a breath

‘til winds blew wild and cold and as I feared

the tide drifting with love and tenderness

swept it all away and disappeared

 

As moon and stars and eyes grew dim as night

a glimmer of the dawn met skies of blue

your graceful serenade shamed in the light

once hidden in shadows of love thought true

 

The ending now quite clear, I can’t disguise

somewhere deep inside…I loved the lies

~~~

 

 

Reviews

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Hi Julie,
just read this one.
It's not surprising that a lot of your reviewers, like me, are men. Why can't we men find ladies like you in the physical world. We'd love to find someone with such insight, such a use of words, such a display of inner feelings. Your writing never disappoints.

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend. I think it may be a bit easier to share feelings in poetry than in the physical world...at least it is for me. :) Julie

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Wow, what an amazing write. Nicely penned.

Kaze~

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)

[MagicAl]

Lovely words here, beautiful write MsJewel! :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you! :) Julie

[Stephen]

As moon and stars and eyes grew dim as night
a glimmer of the dawn met skies of blue
your graceful serenade shamed in the light
once hidden in shadows of love thought true
...
Wonderful imaginary!!

Hey .. Julie loves lies?? Sounds good!! I love when chicks lie ~~ lie to their husbands especially when they spend some time with me ... *Wink* Nice poem .. I can feel the tender flavor of yours unsophisticated lies --- "Every beauty`s made to be blessed in this world but before that .. they`re all lived in Stephen`s seductive heart for long ~~ to walk away with the frozen winds holding a hand of this hot personality crossing the bridges of life ~~~ jumping over the strips of entangled world ~~ living in my heart ... *Wink* It`s an excellent job. Keep it up the great performance, Sweety.

[MsJewel]

Your comments always leave me with a smile! :) Julie

[redzone]

Awww Julie, sometimes it is easier to believe the charade than to feel the pain caused by the charade... your heart is too kind, too romantic, too loving to believe such charades... I always ask but never get answers from such tricksters why they play such charades with people's hearts? What kind of friggen human are you anyway? Are you even human? Sorry Julie, but this ugliness has to stop.

Your poem speaks volumes with metaphoric liveliness, but Julie, don't believe the hype you are way to nice for that...
~~redzone

[MsJewel]

Sometimes the lie is easier to believe than to face the pain of the truth...Thank you for your kind words my sweet friend. :) Julie

[Lyn Anderson]

This is a shiver/goosebumps type of poem. It is wonderful, brilliant, and very relatable.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[Vidya Bacchus]

Sometimes people tend to choose the lies over the truth.Excellent pen Jules :)

[MsJewel]

Sometimes the lies are prettier....Hugs, Julie

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hugs Jules.True that.You are welcome hunny :)

[Frieda P]

Reminds me of that song, I Miss the Misery by Halestorm. We do tend to feel this way at times, silly girls are we! As always, a pleasure Julie.

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Frieda. I've missed you! Welcome Back! Hugs, Julie

[willweb]

This poem was written beautifully but flowed in very dark ink. Maybe the darkest. This was a great Julie and I enjoyed reading this today.

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[s y e]

I read this like a song, I really loved this one my friend, you have out done yourself and blown me away once again!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your always positive and encouraging words :) Julie