So Far Away

~ a romantic scribble ~

~ Paris Nights by Mark Spain ~

 

 

 

So far away

and yet

when the night is warm and the air is thick

and the motion of the breeze
gently

tickles my skin

…like your soft breath
on the nape of my neck…

oh oui mon amour

suddenly
you are here

 

and before I can focus

before I remember

 

my lips whisper

stay

 

…floating

like a secret

on the warm night air…

 

for a moment

I am yours

Reviews

[Troy Henson]

The longing for that someone special.....I am struggling with this every day. The chance to hear her voice, feel her touch is like a dream but a nightmare too. I close my eyes and see her and know that patience is what is needed if my love is so strong.

This is simply touching and resinates with me.

Regards
Troy

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you felt this piece Troy. Thank you for the lovely comment :) Julie

[Troy Henson]

Its my pleasure. :)

[I Am Svetlana]

In a way, this is kind of dark and eerie, but in a good way! I could feel the longing of emotion from when I read this, being able to relate since a good friend of mine recently got locked away a couple days ago and won't be out for about 104 days or so. Deep down, I really like him and he, me in return and he asked me to wait for him until he gets out. I told him in my letter I wrote and sent him this morning that I was in no hurry or interest to be with anyone, that I would kindly wait for him. My dreams were full of him and its like I saw him, felt him next to me...holding me until I drifted off to sleep. Gorgeous write!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment. I'm sorry to hear about your friend - hopefully those dreams will keep you warm until he returns! :) Julie

[wordman]

a beautiful love poem if only for a moment

[MsJewel]

Thanks Ron :) Julie

[Eric]

The word 'Suddenly' is the only thing that jumped out to my disapproving eye... now I am thinking 'and before I can focus before I can remember' could also be better phrased - however it's possibly the best thing I've read yet.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and comment. I appreciate it very much. :) Julie

[s y e]

Sigh... You are my favourite romantic poetess on here. I love how I just get sent to romantic heaven when I read you. Love is a beautiful thing, just like your poem.

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend! Hugs, Julie

[Stephen]

Ha! Very seductive but emotionally plotted. The warmth of true love`s been reflecting through this write ~~ in your loving words. Great job!!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words Stephen :) Julie

[Ruth]

Ohhh my...I read this three times...what a beauty! Wishing they were there...and in mind when they are - good lord...you said it all, sublime and a fav x

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Poppy :) Julie

[MAC]

oh so wish I could have written this, I know my heart has. lovely words from a lady that is full of love and loveliness. simply beautiful....~sigh~

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment and compliment Mark - I feel the same about you. Hugs, Julie

[stars are far]

WOW.. That was so french romantic, like so romantic.. calm.. sweet.. classy.
well done in this..my best for you so far :)

[MsJewel]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the comment :) Julie

[Larq]

I felt as though I was watching a foreign film-and reading the dubbed dialogue...fascinating and romantic! I found myself turning my head to feel soft breathing on my neck! Needless to say-this one drew me right in to the Paris scene! So talented.

[MsJewel]

You are very kind. Thank you for your lovely comment :) Julie

[Chris Micha]

Another amazing write my talented friend. You've hit another home run with this one.

I love the longing you expressed in this. It taps on what I am feeling at the moment.

Bravo! :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend. Hugs, Julie