To Be In Love With You

~ a love poem ~

 

steve hanks art

 

~~~

 

To catch the tender breath of night’s soft velvet skies

and steal away the hours lost in your lovely eyes

Then count each fleck of light shimmering just for you

and wonder how one gaze can do what it can do

 

To feel the lightest brush of silk upon my lips

and find it softer than the moonlight’s pale eclipse

Though smooth it sends a spark, igniting passion’s fire

quenched only by your kiss…this stir of warm desire

 

That has my heart pounding, as the flame gently grows

and at once I’ve fallen, like petals from a rose

I waste not a second, nor worry of the time

but cherish each moment in feelings so sublime

 

For anytime apart feels like eternity

while desperately I ache to embrace the beauty

of everything you are and everything you do

Yes, this is how it feels to be in love with you

~~~

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful artwork and words. When love is abounded. No better place to be.
"Though smooth it sends a spark, igniting passion’s fire
quenched only by your kiss…this stir of warm desire"
A perfect ending to the excellent poem dear friend.
Coyote

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words on my poetry this evening :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my dear friend. I love your kind words.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

This is so wonderful, Ms. J. I like the flow and the rhyme scheme, especially the diction.
Who won't say those lovely words when someone is in love? And who wouldn't be in love with those lovely words?
Excellent, Ms. J. Love it much!

[Sami Khalil]

To be or not to be. To be in love and to share that love is one of the greatest things people have to flame the gentleness of life's and soul's fires. You paint by the brush of love...:)

[Jennie Baron]

Beautiful, eloquent, romantic, sensual, erotic...all that good stuff!

[MsJewel]

Thank you Jennie :) Julie

[MAC]

sigh...................just perfect, the very thought of a woman writing this to me, would be-sigh....

[MsJewel]

I've made you sigh. I'm a happy woman today! :) Julie

[Aethereal]

Your poem is a lovely expression of love. Your 0/1/0/1/0/1/0/1/0/1/0/1 twelve syllable meter falls off from the third verse on, and so I was inspired to write your third verse so it would fit this meter. You may have my inspired verse as a gift. The last verse falls short of the meter in the first verse too. There are definitions of poetry that allow variations in meter, and so this need not be incorrect by another definition.

That drives my pounding heart, as the flame gently grows
and instantly falls as do petals from a rose.
I don’t waste seconds where I worry over time.
I feel each momentary gist of the sublime

[MsJewel]

Thank you so much for your lovely comment and the suggestion. I counted the third verse again and it is tweleve syllables - perhaps I'm counting wrong. Regardless, thanks so much. :) Julie

[Aethereal]

Yes it's twelve syllables, but the accents don't follow the pattern 0/1/0/1/0/1/0/1/0/1/0/1 whereby "0" is a non-accent and "1" is an accent. Your first and second verse follow this accent pattern but your third and forth verses don't. If you're calling this a variable meter poem then what you have done is correct, but not all of your lines match the same meter pattern throughout your poem. In most of my poems, I match the same meter pattern throughout my poem in regards to the same rhyming sound so as to create a song-poem. I just guest they you’re not interested in writing song-poems with a constant beat. You seem to demand a variation in your poem’s rhythm.

[MsJewel]

Don't misunderstand me - it's not that I'm not interested, I was just unclear. Thanks so much for your help. I appreciate it. Julie

[Aethereal]

I understand! I was just making a note of the fact that Classical meter isn't just about syllable count, but also where accents fall on those syllables. Not all poetry tends to be Classical, and that's alright with me.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Simply beautiful and Romantic
I love it.

I loved these stanza's lines.


For anytime apart feels like eternity

while desperately I ache to embrace the beauty

of everything you are and everything you do

Yes, this is how it feels to be in love with you



Thank you for sharing. blessings. kindred poet

[MsJewel]

You are very kind. Thank you :) Julie

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Thank you. And you're very welcome. blessings. kindred poet

[Trace]

What an absolutely lovely poem for one you love.
The meter is spot on and the message is simply beautiful.

I so enjoy reading your incredible poetry my dear friend,

Huggs, Trace

[MsJewel]

Thank you sweetie. I sure have missed you. Hugs, Julie

[kublakhan27]

Your writing is always inspiring, but you seem to be especially inspired these days...your recent works are definitely among the best you've ever done...keep up the great work Julie :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for the lovely comment and compliment. I appreciate you and your friendship :) Julie

[melissa]

This is amazing poem keep up the great work and keep sending me more to read i love reading them.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Melissa :) Julie

[melissa]

You're welcome