Breathtaking, really...

~ # 2 in a series of poems by Trace and myself featuring the art of Fabian Perez in a man's and woman's perspective of the scene ~

art ~ Fabian Perez

 

 

~~~

He placed it next to her wine glass

a perfect rose

long stem, red velvet petals

lovely

breathtaking, really…

 

As were his eyes

and his smile

and the cute tremble in his voice when he asked

“may I have this dance?”

 

Her heart fluttered as he wrapped an arm around her waist

his eyes capturing hers

holding her

tight

toe to toe

hip to hip

 

Her breath quickened and her knees felt weak

as the music filled the room

She could feel the blush covering her neck,

warming her cheeks

 (it must be the wine…)

 

She closed her eyes, her head on his shoulder

her hand finding the curve of his strong back

Hmmm…he smelled like Sunday morning…

soft kisses tangled in linen sheets

 

They moved as one

the dance floor their own

on a night just for two

to a song she will always remember

with a man…..her eyes flew open

…whose name she didn’t know

 

She closed her eyes again

her face nestled against his neck

content

in the curve of his arm

perfect

like a long stemmed red rose

or a Sunday morning

breathtaking, really….

 

And so...

they danced

~~~

Author's Note

The woman's point of view from Trace's poem, Hearts Desire http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/TraceyB/1319422/

You can find Part 1 of this series:
Cat and Mouse http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Julie-Ward/1320141/
and Desires of the Heart http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/TraceyB/1342992/

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

Hmmm…he smelled like Sunday morning…
soft kisses tangled in linen sheets

The lines above suggest so much more than one night of passion. Sunday mornings are reserved for serious relationships. It is an excellent way to show us rather than tell us. Lovely!

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Brianna. This is part of a series I wrote with my writing partner Trace.. Check out his work if you have the opportunity. :) Julie

[Al R. Arce]

You could almost make a song from this piece!

[MsJewel]

Thank you Gabriel :) Julie

[stars are far]

WOW.. That is a nice feeling, portrayed well, and expressed amazingly

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind comment :) Julie

[Passionate_yatish]

lovely to read your elaborated lines.
too good.
:)

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend. :) Julie

[Scott Metro]

Wonderful romance and discovery...
YOU ARE the Princess of the Heart...
Very nice Julie.
Scott

[MsJewel]

Thank you Scott :) Julie

[Scott Metro]

:)
S............

[wordman]

like a sunday morning beautiful write

[MsJewel]

Thank you Ron :) Julie

[Lyn Anderson]

I like this a lot. Perhaps I would not repeat Sunday twice, but maybe that is just me. A nice accompaniment to the first.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind comment :) Julie

[B.J]

Such a delight to read, breathtaking words from the heart, I thought I was reading a scene from a movie

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed this one Barb. Thank you :) Julie

[B.J]

Your welcome it was so evocative brilliant

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is a breathtaking piece Julie .I enjoyed it very much :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind comment :) Julie

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[A. Amos]

Julie your heart is full with romance as alway beautiful write...

[MsJewel]

thank you :) Julie

[adreamer]

It expressive your desires feeling for someone so beautifully it was so beautifully written Julie. :) Larry

[MsJewel]

Thank you Larry :) Julie