It Was There

~ a romantic scribble ~

 

arantza sestayo art

 

 

 

Love came softly

           like the mist in a dream

      as quiet as a breeze

as graceful as a stream

of flowers

               cascading

                         gently through the air

 

         So silent…

                I didn’t know it was there

 

As the breeze blew stronger

each petal on the ground

                      started to scatter

             still without a sound

      leaving just the mist

                       of dreams

                                to take me where

 

Love came softly…

                  but I believe it was there

Reviews

[redzone]

Smiled and then thought, where was I when love came? Was it here or there? Anywhere?? Then I thought ohno I'm one of those who need to be smacked upside the head to know he's in love or loved. Hopeless Julie, tsk tsk. I think if it weren't for your little romantic scribbles (as well as a few others) I wouldn't even know what love is anymore. And you make it feel so wonderful...~~redzone

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your wonderful comment and compliment Curt. I'm thrilled you enjoy my scribbles. Hugs, Julie

[ksbadyal]

Beautiful. This poem felt like a honey-golden moment I wanted to never end!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind comment :) julie

[Kleio13]

sweet and lovely! Nice write

[MsJewel]

thank you :) Julie

[Al R. Arce]

I'm baack! As usual there is nothing I can say that has not been said about your poetry. Just a suggestion at the end: "of the dreams that took me here. Love left slowly, but I believe what I feel..." Or something like that! Gotta run!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your suggestion, however I wanted to keep the metered count. Your ending is pretty though. It's always nice to see you :) Julie

[Saddam]

started to scatter
still without a sound
leaving just the mist
of dreams
to take me where
Love came softly…
but I believe it was there.

Your writing always bloom my heart. How beautiful heart you have! Amezing.

[MsJewel]

You are very sweet. Thank you and have a beautiful day :) Julie

[Saddam]

started to scatter
still without a sound
leaving just the mist
of dreams
to take me where
Love came softly…
but I believe it was there.

Your writing always bloom my heart. How beautiful heart you have! Amezing.

[Passionate_yatish]

great writing skill..checkout my poems as well

[MsJewel]

Thank you. I look forward to reading your poetry :) Julie

[Passionate_yatish]

thank you ..:)
whats your email address?

[redflutterby]

I'm sighing all over this one...you know romance so well. Your words are so soft and sweet but never syrupy. In other words they breath the essence of true love. Theres nothing pretentious or overdone in your poems. Just amazing beauty... ;-)

[MsJewel]

You are very kind. Thank you :) Julie

[Trace]

The rhyme pattern here is amazing
it's almost hidden in the beautiful poetry. .
the way you present your poetry makes it such a pleasure to read and
enhances the readers senses ......

Love this piece.

Trace

[MsJewel]

Thank you sweetie. I've missed you. Hope all is well.
Hugs, Julie

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Beautiful, you have such a tender pen hand, Julie. Wonderful wording and structure here.

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend. :) Julie

[Shaquana Adams]

That ending really got me. *Claps hands slowly* Great job!

-QuanaWana

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie