Butterfly

~ written in Octelle form ~

art ~ Andrew Atroshenko

 

 

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Poised for flight, with wings held high

she dreams she is a butterfly

floating through a sky of blue

to dance ‘pon a cloud or two

sunbeams weave a light within

so shadows can’t find her when

poised for flight, with wings held high

she dreams she is a butterfly

~~~

Author's Note

The Octelle is a form created by Emily Romano. It has eight lines and the rhyme scheme is aabbccaa, the syllable count is 88777788. The first two lines are repeated as the last two lines. What further sets the form, in its description, is using personification and symbolism in a telling manner.

Reviews

[Anand Sehgal]

poised for flight, with wings held high

she dreams she is a butterfly
sweet write. You are extremely good in these colourful depictions :)
Love :)
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[MsJewel]

Thank you Anand! :) Julie

[Anand Sehgal]

pleasure is mine. I'm a fan :)

[Rossen]

Always in awe of your gentle way with words,read this aloud it even made ME sound good!
Thank you for your author's notes they are empowering. Truly beautiful poetry as I
have come to expect..Thank you for sharing,

Rossen

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment and compliment. :) Julie

[kublakhan27]

You've truly taken an established form and made it your own my friend. This piece captivated my imagination with many ideas and emotions. Lovely work Julie :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend :) Julie

[Baby Ricochet]

I went to a ballet once. It was actually pretty cool

[MsJewel]

It is cool! :) Julie

[Brittany Zedalis]

This brought back memories of my childhood for some reason. Wonderful work!

[MsJewel]

Thank you dear one :) Julie

[redflutterby]

Splendid poem Julie... and yes ballerinas do remind me of butterflies. ;-)

[MsJewel]

Me too! Thank you! :) Julie

[Trace]

This reads like a poem that you have written for your lovely daughter as she spreads her wings and leaves the nest.
I love the soft and floating rhyme and story here.

Trace

[MsJewel]

Do they ever really leave Trace? I don't think so - just got home from a shopping spree - furnishing her new apartment. LOL... I do miss her though..Hugs, Julie

[s y e]

You had me at the title. My love for butterflies just soared when I met Frieda, she gave them so much life, much more than what they originally had so when I saw the title I was hooked. This is just gorgeous, Julie. So creative and perfect.

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend. :) Julie

[Tom]

A beautiful, creative poetic write and indeed, the contrasting similarities between the graceful ballet dancer and the majestic butterfly in flight are sublime !

And thanks Ms Jewell for the informative intro regarding an ' Octelle', ( I'm still a bit of a philistine when it comes to poetic form ) !

[MsJewel]

I remember as a little girl going to the ballet with my father. I thought the dancers looked like butterflies....I'm thrilled you enjoyed my poem. Try this form - it's really very simple. :) Julie

[stars are far]

This is very nice, My little sister came to my mind while reading this, when she dance i feel that she is trying to be a butterfly..
that is amazing.. well done dear Julie :)

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled it reminded you of someone special. Thanks for your wonderful comment :) Julie

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

This is so beautifully done, Julie. Thanks for shinning light on another form. Your pen is one to learn from.

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie